袁曉英
【摘要】新推出的一年兩考浙江高考英語(yǔ)試卷引進(jìn)概要寫(xiě)作新題型。這對(duì)浙江師生來(lái)說(shuō)是一個(gè)全新的挑戰(zhàn)?;谳敵鲵?qū)動(dòng)假設(shè),結(jié)合一線教學(xué)實(shí)際,筆者分析出學(xué)生在概要寫(xiě)作中所存在的問(wèn)題,結(jié)合語(yǔ)篇實(shí)例,指明教師在教學(xué)中該如何按策略逐步提高學(xué)生在這方面的寫(xiě)作能力。
【關(guān)鍵詞】高考英語(yǔ) 概要寫(xiě)作 存在問(wèn)題 策略培養(yǎng)
一、引言
自2016年10月份起,浙江省作為高考改革試點(diǎn)省份,英語(yǔ)實(shí)行一年兩考。與之前自主命題相比,試卷的內(nèi)容結(jié)構(gòu)發(fā)生了重大變化。寫(xiě)作部分引進(jìn)新題型——讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)或概要寫(xiě)作?!犊荚囌f(shuō)明》上明確表示“兩種形式在不同考次不定期交替使用”。概要寫(xiě)作原為大學(xué)英語(yǔ)的范疇,高中階段的概要寫(xiě)作為歷史新創(chuàng)。學(xué)生在這一陌生題型上存在諸多問(wèn)題,筆者將以一篇文本為例,提供一些教學(xué)上的策略建議。
2015年出的《考試說(shuō)明》對(duì)概要寫(xiě)作的要求是:提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的短文,要求考生基于該短文寫(xiě)出一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。閱卷時(shí)將主要考慮以下內(nèi)容:(1)對(duì)原文要點(diǎn)的理解和呈現(xiàn)情況;(2)應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的準(zhǔn)確性;(3)上下文的連貫性;(4)對(duì)各要點(diǎn)表達(dá)的獨(dú)立性情況??梢?jiàn),該題型考察的主要是學(xué)生對(duì)所給文本的主旨大意的把握能力,能夠找準(zhǔn)主題句和關(guān)鍵詞,把握篇章結(jié)構(gòu),并能運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確而簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言概括文章,使用一定的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和連接詞,使文章變得通順而流暢。
二、理論依據(jù)
輸入和輸出是語(yǔ)言習(xí)得中不可分割的兩個(gè)部分,二者相輔相成。立于理解基礎(chǔ)上的輸入為后續(xù)輸出的必要條件,而輸出則是輸入的內(nèi)容經(jīng)過(guò)內(nèi)化后自然完成的語(yǔ)言習(xí)得的過(guò)程。輸出的訓(xùn)練是為了促進(jìn)輸入的語(yǔ)言得到不停的強(qiáng)化和內(nèi)化,因此將輸入(閱讀)和輸出(寫(xiě)作)結(jié)合在一起,也就是新的概要寫(xiě)作題型,既強(qiáng)調(diào)了信息的輸入,也強(qiáng)調(diào)了對(duì)輸入信息的重新選擇、組織語(yǔ)言、和銜接運(yùn)用。輸出驅(qū)動(dòng)的假設(shè)認(rèn)為輸出比輸入對(duì)語(yǔ)言的能力發(fā)展驅(qū)動(dòng)力更強(qiáng),以輸出為導(dǎo)向的閱讀會(huì)更有效地帶動(dòng)學(xué)生對(duì)語(yǔ)言體系的注意和加工,提高語(yǔ)言輸入的有效性。概要寫(xiě)作這一目的指向性明確的語(yǔ)言輸出,會(huì)讓學(xué)生在閱讀的時(shí)候更加積極有效地調(diào)動(dòng)思維能力,分析能力和解決問(wèn)題的能力,強(qiáng)化語(yǔ)言輸入的內(nèi)化遷移作用。
三、學(xué)生存在的問(wèn)題
1.主旨把握不清?;趯W(xué)生的字詞積累不夠,對(duì)文本的理解存在一定的偏差,不能準(zhǔn)確地把握住主題句和關(guān)鍵詞。要明確主題句所在的位置,通常為每段的句首,句中或句末。但也有些段落沒(méi)有出現(xiàn)明顯的主題句,學(xué)生必需要有尋找主題句但又不全然依賴主題句的意識(shí),這時(shí)候就需要定位關(guān)鍵詞。關(guān)鍵詞往往以實(shí)詞為主,教師要引導(dǎo)學(xué)生多定位動(dòng)詞、名詞、形容詞為主的關(guān)鍵詞塊,為擴(kuò)詞成句做好準(zhǔn)備。
2.框架結(jié)構(gòu)不明。概要寫(xiě)作的文本體裁決定了文本框架,文本體裁一般為記敘文,議論文,說(shuō)明文三類。記敘文的文本結(jié)構(gòu)特征決定了只要我們把握住了它的六要素,who+what+when+where+why+how,再在末尾加上感悟或啟示就是一篇完整的語(yǔ)篇。議論文的文本結(jié)構(gòu)特征為:opinion+supporting evidence+conclusion.說(shuō)明文的結(jié)構(gòu)特征為:a problem+causes+solution或者是a phenomenon+causes+effects甚或是an object+characteristics/function+ significance.有了整體的一個(gè)框架結(jié)構(gòu),文章的脈絡(luò)就會(huì)變得比較清晰。
3.語(yǔ)言不夠精簡(jiǎn)。由于以往的高考寫(xiě)作任務(wù)為寫(xiě)一篇120-150詞的作文,為了文章有內(nèi)容句式有變化,教師指導(dǎo)學(xué)生可勁地把句式拓展。但是概要寫(xiě)作則側(cè)重在用自己的語(yǔ)言概括主旨,字?jǐn)?shù)必須控制在60字以內(nèi),文本要點(diǎn)一般為四個(gè)左右,也就意味著每個(gè)要點(diǎn)的字?jǐn)?shù)控制在10幾個(gè)左右。既要少又要好,成了學(xué)生的一大難題。學(xué)生往往還保持著原來(lái)的慣性思維,較多地運(yùn)用各種語(yǔ)法句式結(jié)構(gòu),也不會(huì)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)木鋬?nèi)連接手段,來(lái)縮短句子長(zhǎng)度,導(dǎo)致語(yǔ)篇過(guò)長(zhǎng)。
4.原句照搬照抄。很多學(xué)生因?yàn)閷?duì)概要寫(xiě)作其中要求之一要用自己的語(yǔ)言來(lái)表述各要點(diǎn)執(zhí)行力不夠,或者因?yàn)樽鲱}時(shí)間上的倉(cāng)促,語(yǔ)言積累不足,不懂靈活地運(yùn)用同義替換,仍處于最初階段的找準(zhǔn)主題句,直接照抄的省力方式。這就需要教師平時(shí)加強(qiáng)練習(xí)的強(qiáng)度,及時(shí)評(píng)價(jià)反饋,更正學(xué)生的意識(shí)思維模式。
四、教師的教學(xué)策略
教師作為學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)上的指導(dǎo)者,在新題型的背景下,需要及時(shí)吃透題型要求,把握題型特點(diǎn),并相應(yīng)地在教學(xué)上教授一定的策略,讓學(xué)生能夠適應(yīng)新題型,提高得分率。下面以下文為例,談?wù)劯乓獙?xiě)作的三步法:
Many of us invest valuable time, energy and money planning our vacations. We do this because we know for sure that going on vacations must be good for us. Research proves this feeling without a doubt. Vacations help us perform better at work, improve our sleep quality and cushion us against depression.
Yet, despite these benefits, many of us return home with a feeling that our last vacation was OK — but not great. In order to change this, some mistakes should be avoided. A typical one for vacation planners is attempting to maximize value for money by planning trips that have too many things. Perhaps youre planning a trip to Europe, seven cities in 10 days, and you realize it will cost only a little more to add two more destinations to the list. Sounds fine in theory, but hopping from one place to the next hardly gives an opportunity to experience what psychologists call mindfulness — time to take in our new surroundings, time to be present and absorb our travel experiences. Another mistake is that we worry too much about strategic issues such as how to find a good flight deal, how to get from A to B, or which destinations to add or subtract from our journey. These issues may seem important, but our psychological state of mind is far more important.
Actually, vacation happiness is based on the following top rules. First, choose your travel companions wisely, because nothing contributes more significantly to a trip than the right companions. Second, dont spend your vacation time in a place where everything is too expensive so as to maintain a positive mood. Third, shop wisely, for meaningful experiences provide more long-term happiness than physical possessions.
1.確定框架,找準(zhǔn)主題句或?qū)嵲~關(guān)鍵詞。這篇文章的整體框架為總分結(jié)構(gòu)。第二段和第三段又各自有個(gè)小總分。
主題句可位于句首如第三段的第一句,也可位于句中,如第一段。也可以是需要自己整合的如第二段。注意:Tips1:找總領(lǐng)性的而不是過(guò)于詳細(xì)的句子做主題句。例如第一段的主題句應(yīng)該為going on vacations must be good for us. 而不是最后一句vacation的具體好處。Tip 2: 注意連詞和代詞的作用。我們不難從Yet, despite, this 這三個(gè)詞中看出第二段的主題句應(yīng)為this 所指代的第一句的后半句和第二句的整合。but 的存在讓我們從ok和not great當(dāng)中有了選擇傾向。另外,從A typical one 和 Another mistake is 中概括出了兩個(gè)分。Tip 3: 補(bǔ)充的信息,如目的,舉例,理由不能做主題句。第三段的because, so as to,for后面的信息就應(yīng)刪除。
從找實(shí)詞關(guān)鍵詞的策略來(lái)看,attempting to maximize value和worry too much about strategic issues也是為第二段的重點(diǎn)信息。第三段的關(guān)鍵詞為:choose your travel companions,dont spend your vacation time in a place, shop wisely.
2.對(duì)提煉出來(lái)的文章進(jìn)行改寫(xiě)和化繁為簡(jiǎn)。改寫(xiě)遵循兩個(gè)原則,一是同義替換,二是句式變換。這篇文本經(jīng)過(guò)主題句關(guān)鍵詞處理后變?yōu)椋篤acations are good for us. Many of us return home with a feeling that our last vacation was not great. In order to change this, two mistakes should be avoided. One mistake is that planners are attempting to maximize value for money. Another mistake is that we worry too much about strategic issues. Vacation happiness is based on the top rules. Choose the companions, never spend time in a place where everything is too expensive, and shop wisely. 把劃線詞進(jìn)行同義替換,斜體詞進(jìn)行句式變換后,再進(jìn)一步的縮略簡(jiǎn)化后則變成:Vacations benefit everyone, many people come back from vacations not feeling very great. To make our vacations happy, we should avoid two mistakes. One mistake is planners are trying to achieve the fullest value for what we invest into vacations. Another mistake is worrying too much about vacation arrangements. We should follow some rules. Choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
3.用上連接詞使行文流暢。連接詞使得句于句之間,要點(diǎn)與要點(diǎn)之間的銜接過(guò)渡更加自然,語(yǔ)篇的連貫性更強(qiáng)。常用的連接詞為表轉(zhuǎn)折的如however, on the contrary,although等,表因果的如as a result/consequence, therefore,due to/owing to 等,表遞進(jìn)的如whats more, whats worse, besides, in addition, not only…but also等,表總結(jié)的如in brief, to sum up, in conclusion 等。以及一些副詞如unfortunately, hopefully, surprisingly等。上文加上連接詞后最終可變?yōu)椋篤acations benefit everyone, but many people come back from vacations not feeling very great. To make our vacations happy, we should avoid two mistakes — trying to achieve the fullest value for what we invest into vacations and worrying too much about vacation arrangements. Besides, we should follow some rules such as choosing the right companions and destinations and being wise in doing shopping. (63 words)
五、結(jié)語(yǔ)
概要寫(xiě)作在目前高中教學(xué)中仍處于摸索的階段,既要求學(xué)生有一定的閱讀理解能力,又要求能對(duì)原文進(jìn)行重新歸納,展現(xiàn)出綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力,這種有挑戰(zhàn)性的題型需要廣大一線教師積極實(shí)踐,重視學(xué)生在解題過(guò)程中所產(chǎn)生的問(wèn)題,加以指正更改,通過(guò)不斷地強(qiáng)化訓(xùn)練最終提升學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作產(chǎn)出水平。
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