The differences between Grade 7 and Grade 8
2015-10-21 19:41:19陳若曦
第二課堂(課外活動(dòng)版) 2015年3期
Hi， Im Sara. Im a Grade 8 student. I am different from I was in Grade 7.
Im taller and heavier than I was in Grade 7. And Im more and more beautiful. I feel I am smarter than I was in Grade 7. I study English more hard-working than I was in Grade 7. Im friendlier and more carefully so I have more friends than I did in Grade 7. I have longer hair now. All in all， Im better than I was in Grade 7.
Those are my changes. How about you？
黃為老師點(diǎn)評：陳若曦同學(xué)的這篇作文總的來說達(dá)到了要求：全文開篇點(diǎn)題，第二段從三個(gè)方面描述了自己與七年級時(shí)候的不同，最后進(jìn)行了總結(jié)，說到自己變得better。但如果第二段能夠按照外表、學(xué)習(xí)、生活這樣的順序來寫，就會使文章的主體部分更有層次感。另外，對于hard-working和carefully詞性把握不當(dāng)，導(dǎo)致文章出現(xiàn)了語法錯(cuò)誤。
范文：
Hi， Im Sara. Im a Grade 8 student now. I am different from what I was in Grade 7.
Im taller and heavier than I was in Grade 7. And I have longer hair so I look more beautiful. I have made more friends because Im popular in my class. Also， I feel I am smarter because I have learned much more. I am more careful and I study English harder than I did in Grade 7. I believe I can get still better grades. All in all， Im far better than I was one year ago.
Those are my changes. How about yours？
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