Teaching objectives：

most students would be able to check out one of their own composition by using the simple past tense.

Learning and teaching focus：

Check out a composition by using the simple past tense by themselves.

Teaching importance：

How to check out the verbs of the past tense and the part of speech.

Teaching difficulties：

It may be difficult for students to check out the sentence structure.

Possible solutions：By discussing with the partner about the mistakes.

Teaching aids： PPT，learning material for students

Learning and teaching arrangement：

Step1 Leading-in

Present the title of the passage in one of the students’ tests.

在緊張的學(xué)習(xí)壓力下，適當(dāng)?shù)胤潘蓪?duì)調(diào)整心態(tài)有著積極的作用。元旦期間，你去哪里放松心情了呢？請(qǐng)以過(guò)去的一次旅行為話題，根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇100字左右的文章。

（1）你選擇旅游的地點(diǎn)及理由。

（2）你出游的伙伴以及你們的活動(dòng)。

（3）你選擇出游的方式和你的活動(dòng)感受。

（4）……

Step 2 Know about the six ways

1.審題：確定基本要素：5W1H

2.抓要點(diǎn)：What happened？

3.擴(kuò)展成句：Who did what？

4.連句成文：時(shí)間 空間 細(xì)節(jié) 連貫 呼應(yīng)（連詞）

5.查錯(cuò)改錯(cuò)：要盡量剔除錯(cuò)誤

6.謄寫：卷面不工整要扣分

Step 3 Present the 5W1H

Choose one of the article of my students， say sth. about 5W1H of this passage：

Besides studying， you also need to relax yourself. For instance， you can travel with your best friends.

I think that Beijing is one of the most famous countries in China. There are many fantastic sights which can make us feel very happy， so I want to go to Beijing.

On that day， my friends and I went to Beijing. First of all， we went to the Great Wall. It was so long that we all felt very tired. Then we went to the hotel to have a rest. After that， we decided to eat Beijing Duck. After we ate it， it was so delicious that we felt very comfortable. At last， we went to the hotel and went to sleep. What a happy day I had！

I think if you go to Beijing， you will fall in love with it.

Step 4 Discussion

Discuss the linking words.

Step 5 Checking out

Check out some mistakes of the students’ passages.

1.the Past Tense

（1）There had many farm.

（2）We were take the plane to there.

（3）We were lived in a small village.

（4）We driver the car to went home.

（5）My parents decided to went to Hangzhou.

（6）I can’t stopped laughing.

（7）It is relaxed and excited.

（8）But bookstore was don’t open.

（9）I thought Beijing Museum is great for me.

2.The part of speech

（1）That is a specially day.

（2）Today is my best happy day.

（3）It’s my twice time to go to Wenzhou Zoo.

（4）At the last month，we went to the mountain by walk.

（5）Then I back to home.

（6）They said that let our go to the TV.

（7）This is a interesting travel.

Step 6 Discuss

Discuss some mistakes about the sentence structure.

從句：I like park that can listen to music.

中文式：I remember last see she is in the seven years ago.

The study is tired and stressed out.

I think go to school have a little tired.

以動(dòng)詞為主語(yǔ)：Take taxi make me see more thing.

I think swimming very interesting and relaxed，tired.

句義：I was surprised I could visit somewhere one day.

Step 7 Rewrite a passage

Check out the mistakes in their own passages.

Step 8 Homework

Rewrite the passages in the paper.

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書面表達(dá)六步法：

1.審題：when where who why how what

2.抓要點(diǎn)：What happened？

3.擴(kuò)展成句：Who did what？

4.連句成文：時(shí)間 空間 細(xì)節(jié) 連貫 呼應(yīng)（連詞）

5.查錯(cuò)改錯(cuò)：要盡量剔除錯(cuò)誤

6.謄寫：卷面不工整要扣分

（作者單位 浙江省溫州市甌海區(qū)新橋中學(xué)）