I used to be such a shy boy that I even couldn’t give a speech in public or talk to strangers. But things have changed because of my Chinese teacher.

Two years ago， my Chinese teacher asked me to share what I had learned from the books. At first， I felt so nervous because it was my first time to speak in front of the class. When the teacher found it， she gave me lots of useful suggestions. For example， she encouraged me to keep clam and practice over and over again by talking to myself in the mirror. I followed her advice. To my surprise， the speech was a total success.

From then on， I have become more and more outgoing and confident to face the challenges in life.

河南省鄭州金桂中學(xué)

指導(dǎo)老師 黃珂珂

點(diǎn) 評

“I used to be such a…that…”“she encouraged me to…”“I have become…”等時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，長短句結(jié)合，句型表達(dá)非常漂亮。作者描述了自己害怕在公開場合演講，并克服該恐懼的過程，以及這個(gè)經(jīng)歷對自己的影響，層次分明，邏輯清晰。