張祖平 男，80后英語教師，就職于浙江省紹興市樹人中學(xué)，愛好翻譯，勤于寫作。在英語教學(xué)中，注重分層教學(xué)，尤其善于激勵英語基礎(chǔ)薄弱的學(xué)生，用他們的興趣愛好，引領(lǐng)他們進(jìn)行愉快的英語閱讀。自主研發(fā)的“E飛英語口語考試小程序”榮獲2018年紹興市教師自制教具比賽一等獎。

Hi， Im Cindy. I have four good friends. Theyre Jim、Kate、①Jenny and Bob. Jims favorite subject is computer. He likes it because he wants to be a programer②. He has computer lesson③ on Monday and Friday. Kate likes science best. She says its useful. She has science on Tuesday. What about Jenny and Bob？ Oh， Chinese is Jennys favorite subject. She thinks its difficult but interesting. She likes Chinese because she likes her Chinese teacher， Miss Li. Jenny has Chinese every morning. Bob does well in sports， so he likes P.E. best. He has P.E. every Wednesday. He dreams of joining the national sport team④.

浙江省紹興市樹人中學(xué)（75）班 丁峰

1. 優(yōu)點：

作者介紹了四個好朋友最喜歡的學(xué)科和喜歡的理由，條理清楚、用詞豐富，句型多樣。作者把動詞第三人稱單數(shù)likes， has， says， thinks， does， dreams等都寫對了，這點尤其值得點贊。此外，作者還用了and，because，so等連詞，使文章更加連貫。末句的dream of doing結(jié)構(gòu)畫龍點睛，可見小作者平時善于積累。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①英語中并列詞語之間一般用逗號，不用頓號。

②programer改為programmer，前者為拼寫錯誤。

③lesson改為lessons，此處用復(fù)數(shù)泛指該課程。

④sport team改為sports team。

3. 評分：

按照中考英語作文滿分20分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得16～17分。