于淼巖

During this summer vacation， my family and I went to Beijing. Beijing is so beautiful. We visited a lot of interesting places in it.

First， we came to the Palace Museum by subway. It was really crowded there. The guide told us that the Palace Mu？鄄seum had a long history. It s really very big and beautiful. If you want to know more about the Palace Museum， you can go to Beijing to have a look.

Then we went to the Great Wall. It s one of the greatest eight wonders in the world. It s the pride of Chinese. It was built in the Ming Dynasty. One who fails to reach the Great Wall is not a hero. If you have the chance， you can come to the Great Wall.

Finally， we went to visit the Bird s Nest， the Water Cube （水立方） and Temple of Heaven. I was really happy that day.

Five days later， we returned to our city. I decide to go to Beijing University in the future because it s my dream. So I must study hard from now on！

【教師點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文是一篇?jiǎng)倓傔M(jìn)入九年級(jí)的學(xué)生寫的作文。

小作者按時(shí)間順序?qū)懗隽俗约涸诒本┢陂g參觀的名勝，也寫出了自己的觀后感。全文主題突出、層次清晰、行文流暢。文章結(jié)尾也表達(dá)了作者的美好愿望！

（指導(dǎo)教師：于長英）