黑龍江省五大連池龍鎮(zhèn)農(nóng)場學(xué)校九（1）班 于淼巖

During this summer vacation，my family and I went to Beijing.Beijing is so beautiful.We visited a lot of interesting places in it.

First，we came to the Palace Museum by subway.It was really crowded there.The guide told us that the Palace Museum had a long history.It's really very big and beautiful.If you want to know more about the Palace Museum，you can go to Beijing to have a look.

Then we went to the Great Wall.It's one of the greatest eight wonders in the world.It's the pride of Chinese.It was built in the Ming Dynasty.One who fails to reach the Great Wall is not a hero.If you have the chance，you can come to the Great Wall.

Finally，we went to visit the Bird's Nest，the Water Cube （水立方）and Temple of Heaven.I was really happy that day.

Five days later，we returned to our city.I decide to go to Beijing University in the future because it's my dream.So I must study hard from now on！

【教師點評】

本文是一篇剛剛進(jìn)入九年級的學(xué)生寫的作文。

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