重慶市人民(融僑)小學(xué)六(1)班 余沐霖
指導(dǎo)老師:陳江月
評(píng)語(yǔ)
A very mature self-re fl ection. Try to combine sentences together instead of trying to start them with words like “ because” and “so”.
這是一篇非常成熟的自我反省的文章。請(qǐng)你試著合并短句,并且不要用“because”和“so”作為句子的開(kāi)頭。