安徽東至縣第二中學(xué)初三(14)班 劉 冉

Good morning,ladies and gentlemen!It's my honor to speak here,and I am very glad to share my topic with you.Today I'd like to talk about a special gift for me.

Do you have special gifts in your life?I believe that all of the people①hear about gifts.Of course,me too!I have lots of gifts in my room，but my favorite gift in childhood is a toy bear.On my fourth birthday,I was very happy because I received a special gift that my father bought for me.When I opened the box,I found it was a beautiful toy bear.

Look!This bear is brown and cute.Half-circle ears,a small nose pointed outwards,a pair of eyes like black pearls,a chubby body and a round head.I like it very much.I treat the toy bear as a good friend and we have come to an agreement,“Study hard and grow up together.”Since then,the bear has accompanied me.

As a kid,I slept with the bear on my arms②every evening.When I was young,I was afraid of dark，and with this toy bear staying by my side,I became brave.When I was happy,I often spoke,sang and danced to her.When I was discouraged,it reminded me“Come on.Study hard.Don't give up!”So I regard it as my lifelong friend.

This bear has been with me for many years and I have special feelings with her.Also,I have a lot of memories with her.I think I will keep it forever.I love it because this bear often brings fun to me and my family.What about you?Do you have a special gift,too?

Thanks for listening!

(指導(dǎo)教師：胡應(yīng)余)

【教師點(diǎn)評】

這是一篇原創(chuàng)的演講稿。全文緊緊圍繞“a special gift”這一主題，重點(diǎn)闡述了作者對toy bear的印象與情感。本文內(nèi)容翔實(shí)，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，語言流暢，作者充分表達(dá)了自己對禮物的真情實(shí)感，是一篇成功的習(xí)作。

作者恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了brown,cute,brave,discouraged,reminded,regard,half-circle ears,a small nose,a pair of eyes,a chubby body,memories,a round head,has accompanied,staying by my side,sang and danced,be with me,keep...forever,brings fun等單詞和短語，從而增強(qiáng)了文章的表達(dá)力和感染力。

此外，擬人化的修辭手法以及定語從句的使用，顯示出了小作者扎實(shí)的英語功底。而且時(shí)態(tài)的使用非常正確，人稱的運(yùn)用也恰到好處。當(dāng)然，文章中也存在一些可待完善之處：

①hear about改為have received(收到過)會比較合乎常理。

②every evening改為every night，這樣更加符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。