張小梅

建議信是就某事提出自己的建議或忠告，以便讓對(duì)方接受自己的想法、主張并解決有關(guān)問(wèn)題。建議信可以寫(xiě)給個(gè)人，就其遇到的某個(gè)問(wèn)題提出自己的看法或觀點(diǎn)；也可以寫(xiě)給某個(gè)組織或者機(jī)構(gòu)，就改進(jìn)其服務(wù)等提出建議或忠告。建議信要給出寫(xiě)信的原因，建議的內(nèi)容，提出建議的理由，而且提出的理由要合情合理，語(yǔ)氣一定要得當(dāng)，既要委婉禮貌，又要有說(shuō)服力。

寫(xiě)建議信首先要明確寫(xiě)作意圖，即簡(jiǎn)要陳述事由，簡(jiǎn)單介紹自己，注意語(yǔ)氣。建議信的特點(diǎn)：簡(jiǎn)明扼要、目的明確、具有合理性和說(shuō)服力。

寫(xiě)建議信也要遵循信件的基本格式：

①信頭（heading），寫(xiě)信人的姓名和地址要寫(xiě)在右上角，收信人的姓名和地址要寫(xiě)在左上角。

②稱(chēng)呼（salutation），即對(duì)收信人的稱(chēng)呼，一般用dear/my dear ...。

③正文（body），即信件的主要內(nèi)容。

④信尾客套語(yǔ)（complimentary close），寫(xiě)信人在信的右（或左）下角，寫(xiě)上表示自己對(duì)收信人一種禮貌客氣的謙稱(chēng)，一般有sincerely yours，yours sincerely，yours truly，yours等。

⑤信尾簽名（signature），在信末寫(xiě)上寫(xiě)信人的姓名，如：Li Hua。

建議信有一些常用的句式，如開(kāi)頭常用句式：

I am writing to express my views about ...

You have asked me for my advice concerning ...and i will try to make some useful suggestions。

表達(dá)建議的常用句式：

I would recommend that ...

In my opinion， it would be beneficial if ...

As to ... i suggest that you choose ...

You do not have to devote all your time to ...

請(qǐng)同學(xué)們給一位承建社區(qū)建筑的建筑師寫(xiě)一封建議信，要求使用委婉的表達(dá)，望其改善建筑，給殘疾人提供方便。

習(xí)作1

Rencently， Im told that an architect of a new railway station is going to be constructed in our country， I hope you will not mind me writing to make some suggestions.

First of all， with common paths uneasy for disabled people to pass， adequate access for wheelchairs is needed， which can make them feel as important as other people.

Secondly， I wonder if there would be a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.

Last but not the least， as disabled people face the trouble in moving， it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.

Though in some ways， the added construction may occupy much space， the advantages overweight the disadvantages， for it will contribute to the harmony of society.

Enthusiastic to help， I hope my suggestions can meet with your approval.

點(diǎn)評(píng)

這篇習(xí)作對(duì)同學(xué)們有三個(gè)基本要求：

1. 掌握信件的基本格式；

2. 學(xué)會(huì)使用委婉禮貌表達(dá)進(jìn)行建議；

3. 提出有效建議并清晰表達(dá)。

習(xí)作一有以下特點(diǎn)：

1. 沒(méi)有將信件的基本格式寫(xiě)到位，忽略了開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾。沒(méi)有稱(chēng)謂和落款，也沒(méi)有最基本的自我介紹，有時(shí)候開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山會(huì)讓讀信人摸不到頭腦。

2. 正文中提供的建議語(yǔ)氣委婉，這一點(diǎn)上完成得不錯(cuò)。如：

I hope you will not mind me writing to make some suggestions.

I wonder if there would be a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.

... it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.

習(xí)作2

Dear architect，

I head that you are to be the architect for the new railway station in our area， I hope you will not mind me writing to ask if you have thought about the needs of disabled customers. In particular， I wonder if you have considered the following things.

Considering the situation， I want to put forward some suggestions on how to make it more comfortable for people， especially for disabled people.

First of all， the project should separate a road for the disabled to pass， which is larger than the normal ones. Because the disabled is more difficult than normal people to walk.

Second， they should transformed the ticket office into a convenient one， such as making the table lower and so on.

Finally， on the way to the railway， it would be handy to help the disabled to carry things with a slid table to carry things.

I hope my suggestions will meet with your approval.

建議

1. 習(xí)作一、二都很好地使用了委婉的句式進(jìn)行建議，除此之外還有類(lèi)似表達(dá)可供選擇，比如：

... it would be a good idea if ...

It would be convenient that ...

Thanks for going through my suggestions ...

2. 習(xí)作一、二都要明確地給建筑師提出了不同的建議，讓其在進(jìn)行建筑設(shè)計(jì)時(shí)多從殘疾人的角度出發(fā)，為他們提供更多的方便。

習(xí)作一給出了三個(gè)建議，其中... dequate access for wheelchairs is needed ...這個(gè)表達(dá)中的access用在了點(diǎn)上，但是... a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.這句話的句意沒(méi)有講清楚，建議改為 ... a space for wheelchairs in waiting rooms。

第三個(gè)建議中 ... as disabled people face the trouble in moving， it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.表達(dá)不錯(cuò)，但這個(gè)建議不是給建筑師提的，應(yīng)該屬于對(duì)公眾的呼吁。

習(xí)作二也給出了三個(gè)建議，并且這三個(gè)建議的角度都非常好。有兩處需要修改： ... which is larger than the normal ones. Because the disabled is more difficult than normal people to walk.這個(gè)句子中l(wèi)arger應(yīng)改為wider， is應(yīng)改為are。

此外，習(xí)作二的前兩段占據(jù)的篇幅過(guò)多，使建議的部分顯得比較單薄，可將一二段壓縮成一段，并對(duì)建議部分加以豐富。

范文

Dear Mr. Rogers，

Im Li hua. I learnt from the news report that you are appointed as the chief architect for our city railway station. Would you mind my writing to ask if need of disabled people has been considered. I wonder if you would discuss the issue with me in sequence of getting on a train. Here is the advice.

It would be convenient that the entrance and the exit of the station are designed near the parking lot， which can be reserved and benefit those with walking disability. Besides， it would help to adapt some stairs to wheelchairs while fixing adjustable seats in the huge waiting hall. Since disabled people tend to call for more care， more specially-built toilets as well as more evident signs are required. Eventually when disabled people are going aboard， would you broadened the passage appropriately in case of the crowds rushing？

Thanks for going through my suggestions， which are supposed to meet with your kind approval. We are looking forward to a considerate railway station where disabled people can go on as satisfactory and comfortable a journey as the able-bodied.

Would you mind taking those above into consideration？

Yours sincerely，

Li hua