張小梅

建議信是就某事提出自己的建議或忠告，以便讓對方接受自己的想法、主張并解決有關問題。建議信可以寫給個人，就其遇到的某個問題提出自己的看法或觀點；也可以寫給某個組織或者機構(gòu)，就改進其服務等提出建議或忠告。建議信要給出寫信的原因，建議的內(nèi)容，提出建議的理由，而且提出的理由要合情合理，語氣一定要得當，既要委婉禮貌，又要有說服力。

寫建議信首先要明確寫作意圖，即簡要陳述事由，簡單介紹自己，注意語氣。建議信的特點：簡明扼要、目的明確、具有合理性和說服力。

寫建議信也要遵循信件的基本格式：

①信頭（heading），寫信人的姓名和地址要寫在右上角，收信人的姓名和地址要寫在左上角。

②稱呼（salutation），即對收信人的稱呼，一般用dear/my dear ...。

③正文（body），即信件的主要內(nèi)容。

④信尾客套語（complimentary close），寫信人在信的右（或左）下角，寫上表示自己對收信人一種禮貌客氣的謙稱，一般有sincerely yours，yours sincerely，yours truly，yours等。

⑤信尾簽名（signature），在信末寫上寫信人的姓名，如：Li Hua。

建議信有一些常用的句式，如開頭常用句式：

I am writing to express my views about ...

You have asked me for my advice concerning ...and i will try to make some useful suggestions。

表達建議的常用句式：

I would recommend that ...

In my opinion， it would be beneficial if ...

As to ... i suggest that you choose ...

You do not have to devote all your time to ...

請同學們給一位承建社區(qū)建筑的建筑師寫一封建議信，要求使用委婉的表達，望其改善建筑，給殘疾人提供方便。

習作1

Rencently， Im told that an architect of a new railway station is going to be constructed in our country， I hope you will not mind me writing to make some suggestions.

First of all， with common paths uneasy for disabled people to pass， adequate access for wheelchairs is needed， which can make them feel as important as other people.

Secondly， I wonder if there would be a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.

Last but not the least， as disabled people face the trouble in moving， it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.

Though in some ways， the added construction may occupy much space， the advantages overweight the disadvantages， for it will contribute to the harmony of society.

Enthusiastic to help， I hope my suggestions can meet with your approval.

點評

這篇習作對同學們有三個基本要求：

1. 掌握信件的基本格式；

2. 學會使用委婉禮貌表達進行建議；

3. 提出有效建議并清晰表達。

習作一有以下特點：

1. 沒有將信件的基本格式寫到位，忽略了開頭和結(jié)尾。沒有稱謂和落款，也沒有最基本的自我介紹，有時候開門見山會讓讀信人摸不到頭腦。

2. 正文中提供的建議語氣委婉，這一點上完成得不錯。如：

I hope you will not mind me writing to make some suggestions.

I wonder if there would be a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.

... it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.

習作2

Dear architect，

I head that you are to be the architect for the new railway station in our area， I hope you will not mind me writing to ask if you have thought about the needs of disabled customers. In particular， I wonder if you have considered the following things.

Considering the situation， I want to put forward some suggestions on how to make it more comfortable for people， especially for disabled people.

First of all， the project should separate a road for the disabled to pass， which is larger than the normal ones. Because the disabled is more difficult than normal people to walk.

Second， they should transformed the ticket office into a convenient one， such as making the table lower and so on.

Finally， on the way to the railway， it would be handy to help the disabled to carry things with a slid table to carry things.

I hope my suggestions will meet with your approval.

建議

1. 習作一、二都很好地使用了委婉的句式進行建議，除此之外還有類似表達可供選擇，比如：

... it would be a good idea if ...

It would be convenient that ...

Thanks for going through my suggestions ...

2. 習作一、二都要明確地給建筑師提出了不同的建議，讓其在進行建筑設計時多從殘疾人的角度出發(fā)，為他們提供更多的方便。

習作一給出了三個建議，其中... dequate access for wheelchairs is needed ...這個表達中的access用在了點上，但是... a space at the end of each row for people in wheelchairs to sit next to their friends in waiting rooms.這句話的句意沒有講清楚，建議改為 ... a space for wheelchairs in waiting rooms。

第三個建議中 ... as disabled people face the trouble in moving， it would be handy to arrange for some staffs near the entrance to help them get to the waiting places easily.表達不錯，但這個建議不是給建筑師提的，應該屬于對公眾的呼吁。

習作二也給出了三個建議，并且這三個建議的角度都非常好。有兩處需要修改： ... which is larger than the normal ones. Because the disabled is more difficult than normal people to walk.這個句子中l(wèi)arger應改為wider， is應改為are。

此外，習作二的前兩段占據(jù)的篇幅過多，使建議的部分顯得比較單薄，可將一二段壓縮成一段，并對建議部分加以豐富。

范文

Dear Mr. Rogers，

Im Li hua. I learnt from the news report that you are appointed as the chief architect for our city railway station. Would you mind my writing to ask if need of disabled people has been considered. I wonder if you would discuss the issue with me in sequence of getting on a train. Here is the advice.

It would be convenient that the entrance and the exit of the station are designed near the parking lot， which can be reserved and benefit those with walking disability. Besides， it would help to adapt some stairs to wheelchairs while fixing adjustable seats in the huge waiting hall. Since disabled people tend to call for more care， more specially-built toilets as well as more evident signs are required. Eventually when disabled people are going aboard， would you broadened the passage appropriately in case of the crowds rushing？

Thanks for going through my suggestions， which are supposed to meet with your kind approval. We are looking forward to a considerate railway station where disabled people can go on as satisfactory and comfortable a journey as the able-bodied.

Would you mind taking those above into consideration？

Yours sincerely，

Li hua