新人校高一新生既興奮又緊張，開(kāi)始高中生活讓許多同學(xué)興奮不已，但開(kāi)學(xué)之初的軍訓(xùn)卻又讓許多同學(xué)感到緊張。有的同學(xué)認(rèn)為軍訓(xùn)能鍛煉意志，對(duì)緊張的高中生活有幫助；但有的同學(xué)卻認(rèn)為軍訓(xùn)是多余的，浪費(fèi)時(shí)間。請(qǐng)聽(tīng)聽(tīng)同學(xué)們的呼聲，另外，你又是怎么看呢？

When go to high school，the first thing for eyery student is to join in military training.Many students hold the view that it should be abolished.

First of all，military training always lasts for half a month，which can't effectively improve students' physical quality.Besides，the intensity of military training is higher than stu dents' daily exercise，so it will result in many serious problems.For example，some students burn their skin，some feel uncomfortable，and some even injure.What's worse，there may appear some unexpected conflicts between teachers，students and military officers.If schools can't find a proper way to deal with all these problems in time，to abolish the military training is necessary.

In my opinion，military training shouldn't be abolished.First，there are many different kinds of group activitiesin military training，which every student plays an equalimportant role and may influence the whole performance.Therefore，students would realize how important thel teamwork is.Second，compared with ordinary exercise，military training is of a higher intensity for most students.In this training，a strong willpower will be needed andstudents' body would be built gradually.Third，when facing a new class and a new school，students might feel a bit nervous and strange.They can become familiar with each other more quickly by military training.

All in all，military training can benefit from students a lot.It is an important experience in one's life.

本篇文章的話(huà)題是目前每一個(gè)進(jìn)入高中學(xué)生面臨的一門(mén)課程，每一位同學(xué)都有自己的考慮和想法，因此，同學(xué)們有話(huà)可寫(xiě)。文章圍繞是否需要軍訓(xùn)還是取消的話(huà)題展開(kāi)，各抒己見(jiàn)，論據(jù)充分、層次清楚。文童選擇了一些高級(jí)詞匯，如：abolish，intensity，result in，conflict，play an important role in，willpower等。承接詞匯恰如其分，如：first of all，besides，for example，what's worse，in one's opinion，first，second，third，therefore，all in all等。句式的變化與復(fù)雜性也是文章的一大亮點(diǎn)，如：that引導(dǎo)同位語(yǔ)從句；which引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句；compared with...過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)及when facing...狀語(yǔ)從句的省略；be of+名詞固定句式等。文章中也有一些小錯(cuò)誤，同時(shí)一些句式還可以再完善?？傮w來(lái)講，這算是一篇高大上的習(xí)作。

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When going to high school，the first thing for every student is to join in military training.Many students hold the view that it should be abolished.First of all，military training always lasts for about half a month，which can't effectively improve students' physical quality.Besides，the intensity of military training is relatively higher than that of students' daily exercise，resulting in many serious problems.For example，some students burn their skin，some feel uncomfortable，and some are even injured.What's worse，there may appear some unexpected conflicts between teachers，students and military officers.If schools can't find a proper way to deal with all these problems in time，to abolish the military training is necessary.

But as far as I'm concerned，military training is vital. First，there are many different kinds of group activities in military training，in which every student plays an equal important role and may influence the whole performance.Therefore，students would realize how important the teamwork is.Second，compared with ordinary exercise，military training is of a higher intensity for most students.To overcome every difficulty in this training，a strong willpower will be needed and students' body would be built up gradually as well.Third， when facing a new class and a new school，students might feel a bit nervous and strange.Group activities in military training can help them get familiar with each other much more quickly.

All in all，military training can benefit students a lot.It is an important experience in one's life.