“You want to be a teacher?Don’t be silly.Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.”My friend was puzzling①when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future.I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.

I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child.They are kind and respectable,like angels.They are learned,helpful and encouraging.I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for②success.I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn,change and grow up with my students.I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free.The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing,doing research work and anything I like.

I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher.Firstly,I’ll study hardly③to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills.Secondly,I’ll love my students and take proud④in my profession.Thirdly,I’ll trust in them,respect them and understand them.

I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world.I’ll take it as my lifelong career.I will never regret my decision.I think my wish will come true.Do you think so?

山東省梁山縣楊營(yíng)一中初二 高成浩

1.優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文以反意設(shè)問(wèn)句開(kāi)頭，突出了主題。本文層次清晰，語(yǔ)言得當(dāng)，銜接緊湊，說(shuō)服力強(qiáng)，是一篇值得推薦的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2.需要修改的地方：

① puzzling改為puzzled。修飾人時(shí)用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；

② for改為to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“ 引起；導(dǎo)致；通向”；

③ hardly改為hard。hard意為“努力地”，hardly意為“幾乎不”；

④ proud改為pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意為“以……自豪”。

3.評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。