呂鴻妤

提示：每個(gè)人都有自己的夢(mèng)想工作，并立志努力為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想而努力。你的夢(mèng)想工作是什么？為什么你選擇這樣的夢(mèng)想工作？你要如何實(shí)現(xiàn)這個(gè)夢(mèng)想呢？請(qǐng)以My Dream Job為題，結(jié)合課本知識(shí)及自身實(shí)際寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文。

要求：80詞左右。

My dream job is a fantastic job for many people. I want to be a journalist. And Im going to study hard to make my dream come true.

First， Im going to write articles and send them to newspapers and magazines. I am going to practice writing something when I have free time. Then， I want to study at a university in Beijing when I finish high school. I will try to get good grades at the university. After that， I want to work at a TV station and travel around the world with my good friends.

As long as I try my best to do what I want to do， everything will not be difficult for me.

【簡(jiǎn)評(píng)】本文主要描述了小作者的夢(mèng)想工作，My dream job is a fantastic job for many people. I want to be a journalist. 開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)題。主體部分根據(jù)自己的實(shí)際情況，分別描述目前、高中以及大學(xué)畢業(yè)后，制定切實(shí)可行的目標(biāo)為之努力。同時(shí)也教育了那些沒(méi)有理想和目標(biāo)，有些迷茫的同學(xué)，這是本文的成功之處。從語(yǔ)言的使用角度來(lái)說(shuō)，不但使用了一些生動(dòng)的動(dòng)詞，準(zhǔn)確的名詞，同時(shí)使用了時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，條件狀語(yǔ)從句和賓語(yǔ)從句。

指導(dǎo)教師：王靜

My Dream Job 劉佳怡

Everyone has his dream job. My dream job is to be a doctor，because I think it is the greatest job in the world.

As we know， health is money. But in modern life， many people are not good in health. If I am a doctor， I will help people get rid of their diseases. If I am a doctor， I am going to save peoples lives. If I am a doctor， I will try my best to bring happiness to others.

Then how am I going to do that？ First， I should study hard and do my homework carefully every day. Next I will go to college after high school. Finally， I will work for patients in a hospital in Beijing. I believe my dream will come true one day.

【簡(jiǎn)評(píng)】本文是一篇有關(guān)職業(yè)夢(mèng)想的作文，有了夢(mèng)想，生活才會(huì)有目標(biāo)。小作者充分運(yùn)用了所學(xué)單詞、句型、條件狀語(yǔ)從句以及一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)。用first， next， finally分3點(diǎn)來(lái)說(shuō)明為夢(mèng)想工作所做的努力，條理清晰。最后緊扣主題，既是總結(jié)又是方向。小作者采用的是總分總的結(jié)構(gòu)，中心明確，是一篇值得借鑒的佳作。

指導(dǎo)教師：曹麗霞

編輯/丁俊玲