Asan old saying goes，“Rosesgiven，fragrance in hand.”Volunteering others makes me happy. Last winter vacation，Iwent to the old people's home with my classmates.Not onlydidIfeel good abouthelping others，but Ialso spent time doing something meaningful.

In the morning，we got up early and headed to the old people’s home.First，we sang a song.Then every student presented their own performances. WhenI saw the elderly smilingand clapping，my heart was filled with joy.Inthe end，we cleaned up their rooms and gave each of them a gift.

During this activity，Irealized that helping others is a worthwhile thing.It can not only bring happiness to others but also make me feel fulfilled.

Fromnow on，I will try mybest to bea helpful person and spread kindness wherever I go.

河南省鄭州市第八中學(xué)

指導(dǎo)老師劉改香

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習(xí)作以諺語開篇，說明了志愿服務(wù)活動的互助性。作者在描寫志愿服務(wù)經(jīng)歷的過程中，事實和觀點兩部分的寫作交錯展開，同時“sawtheelderlysmilingandclapping”“was filledwith joy”“makeme feel fulfilled”等表達使得文章生動形象。“Notonly..but also...”“Inthe end”“Fromnowon”等句型和邏輯連接詞的運用使得文章過渡自然、銜接連貫。