主 持 人：鄭云（江蘇省特級(jí)教師）

組稿團(tuán)隊(duì)：江蘇省鄭云網(wǎng)絡(luò)名師工作室

It was the homecoming parade in Rockwall， Texas. Tyra Winters， wearing her uniform， was riding at the top of the school’s float.

Suddenly， she heard a scream. Looking down， she saw a two-year-old boy on the road gasping for air. His mother looked nervous. A candy blocked his windpipe and made him choked. “I see a little red face and his mom crying ‘Help！ Help！’” Winters said.

“There was no coughing and no breathing.” The boy’s mother said. No one knew how to help. As a student with dreams of becoming a doctor， Winters had learned the Heimlich maneuver. She jumped off the float and ran to the boy. “I tilted him and gave three good back hits，” she said. Soon， the boy coughed up the candy and began breathing again. Without a word， Winters gave the boy back to his mother and went back to the float.

It all happened so fast that the boy’s mother never had time to thank her. “She didn’t need to，” says Winters， “I knew how she was feeling. There are many kind people in the world.”

homecoming parade家庭游行 float n. 輕型車 scream n. 尖叫

gasp v. 大口喘氣 block v. 堵塞 windpipe n. 氣管

choke v. 嗆 cough v. 咳嗽 breathe v. 呼吸

Heimlich maneuver海姆立克急救法 tilt v. 傾斜

As a student with dreams of becoming a doctor， Winters had learned the Heimlich maneuver.

作為一名夢(mèng)想成為醫(yī)生的學(xué)生，溫特斯學(xué)會(huì)了海姆立克急救法。介詞短語“with dreams of becoming a doctor”作后置定語，修飾“a student”。此句謂語動(dòng)詞“had learned”使用的是過去完成時(shí)，表示在救人之前她已經(jīng)學(xué)會(huì)了海姆立克急救法。

1. What is the central message of this passage？

A. We should always be grateful.

B. Candies are easy to block children’s windpipe.

C. It is important for us to learn the skills of first aids.

你所在學(xué)校?？挠⑽膶跒楹粲醮蠹蚁蛏磉叺陌駱訉W(xué)習(xí)，準(zhǔn)備評(píng)選星級(jí)學(xué)生獎(jiǎng)。假如你是李磊，請(qǐng)你用英文向?qū)W校寫一封推薦信，推薦一名同學(xué)獲得“……之星獎(jiǎng)”。獎(jiǎng)項(xiàng)可參考下面提供的短語，也可自擬。推薦信的內(nèi)容須包含能力、個(gè)性和行動(dòng)等要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

可參考的短語：

學(xué)習(xí)之星 Learning Star Award 進(jìn)步之星 Progress Star Award

禮儀之星 Etiquette Star Award 閱讀之星 Reading Star Award

勞動(dòng)之星 Labor Star Award 科學(xué)之星 Science Star Award

才藝之星 Talent Star Award 寫作之星 Writing Star Award

Dear principal，

I would like to recommend Liu Tao for the Sports Star Award. I bet that he must be the best student to get this award. Now let me introduce him.

Liu Tao is good at different kinds of ball games， such as table tennis， football and basketball. His favorite ball game is football because he is a good runner and an excellent leader. As a result， he is the most important member in our school football team. He is also interested in swimming and climbing.

Liu Tao is one of my best friends because of his good personality. Liu Tao seldom behaves bad so he is always patient to everyone. If someone hurts， he will help them right away. Once， a student felt quite uncomfortable after a long running. Although he was tired out too， he still tried his best to help the student.

Liu Tao wants to be a member of the national team in the future， so he practices running for a long time after school. I think he will achieve his dream and get many gold medals some day.

I hope he can get the Sports Star Award and I will be thankful and happy if you agree.

Yours faithfully，

Li Lei

推薦信主體部分，條理可以更清晰一些。每一段開頭可以先表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)，然后進(jìn)一步用1-2個(gè)事實(shí)來支撐觀點(diǎn)。如：He has many good qualities. First， ...Second， ...

關(guān)注文章的整體性，段落與段落之間過渡要自然，可以合理使用一些關(guān)聯(lián)詞、插入語，如：not only... but also...， what’s more等。

結(jié)尾部分可以再用一句話概括一下Liu Tao的優(yōu)勢(shì)，如：He is such an excellent student that...，突出人物特點(diǎn)，再次點(diǎn)題推薦某人獲獎(jiǎng)。

Dear principal，

I would like to recommend Liu Tao for the Sports Star Award. I bet that he must be the best student to get this award. Now let me introduce him to you.

Liu Tao is so smart that he is good at different kinds of ball games， such as table tennis， football and basketball. His favorite ball game is football because he is a good runner and an excellent leader. As a result， he is the most important member in our school football team. He is also interested in swimming and climbing.

Liu Tao has many good personalities. First， Liu Tao is gentle. He seldom behaves angrily so he is always patient with everyone. Second， he is helpful. If someone hurts， he will help them right away. Once a student felt quite uncomfortable after a long running. Although he was tired out too， he still tried his best to help the student. Third， he is fond of sports. He says sports will not only improve his own quality but also cheer him up and make him more confident.

Above all， Liu Tao wants to be a member of the national team in the future to win glory for the country， so he practices running for a long time after school. I think he will achieve his dream and get many gold medals some day.

Liu Tao has so many advantages to get this award that I think he is the most suitable person to get the Sports Star Award and I will be quite thankful and happy if you agree.

Yours faithfully，

Li Lei

（江蘇省泰興市分界初級(jí)中學(xué) 袁天樂）

文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰完整，首尾呼應(yīng)，點(diǎn)題到位。小作者使用了多種句型避免了文章的單調(diào)乏味。在正文第四段中，小作者介紹了Liu Tao對(duì)未來的展望，其中用“win glory for the country”表達(dá)了為國(guó)爭(zhēng)光的愿望，一個(gè)有家國(guó)情懷又熱愛運(yùn)動(dòng)的優(yōu)秀學(xué)生躍然紙上，升華了主題。

（江蘇省泰興市黃橋初級(jí)中學(xué) 閭娟）