My name is Alice. I have a sister. Her name is Gina. She is tall and looksnice with long hair. My sister is a good student and she’s always good for淤herclassmates and teachers. She does well in math and English. On weekends， shehelps me with my study and we play sport于after that. Gina’s room is not very tidy.Her books are usually on the desk and her bed. Her school things are everywherein the room. I help her with find盂her things everyday. We are sisters and we aregood friends， too.

江蘇省連云港市羅陽(yáng)中學(xué)王芹芹

點(diǎn)評(píng)

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：本文介紹了一個(gè)人物，“我”的姐姐吉娜。作者從人物姓名、身高、外貌寫到學(xué)習(xí)情況，個(gè)性特點(diǎn)，以及兩人的相處日常，吉娜的形象在描述中也漸漸變得立體起來(lái)。全文語(yǔ)句正確流暢，邏輯連貫，是一篇合格的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

需要修改的地方：

①for 改為with。be good with 是固定短語(yǔ)，表示“與某人相處融洽”。

②sport 后加s。固定短語(yǔ)play sports 表示“進(jìn)行體育運(yùn)動(dòng)”。

③find 后加-ing。介詞with 后面動(dòng)詞需加上-ing，變?yōu)閯?dòng)名詞。

評(píng)分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分25 分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得23 分。