I still remember the day when I first went to school at the age of six. All thethings in the school were so wonderful. The school was just like a beautiful gardenfor淤me. I was very happy and excited.

Every morning I get up early. I enjoy reading aloud in the morning. I likelistening to the teachers and answering his于questions in class. In the evening， I domy homework. I feel like a farmer working hard in the fields.

Im busy with my subjects， but I also have a great time play盂with myclassmates. During the break， I often have a rest out of the classroom and talk withmy friends. The blue sky， the white clouds， the flying birds， all those things aroundme make me happy.

江蘇省贛榆縣羅陽中學(xué) 呂偉祥

本期點(diǎn)評名師

陳傳光男，江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)高級教師、連云港市新333 工程教學(xué)標(biāo)兵、連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁，從事教育教學(xué)工作多年；曾獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎(jiǎng)及班主任基本功大賽市一等獎(jiǎng)；有多篇論文在各核心和主流期刊上發(fā)表。

點(diǎn)評

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：本文條理清楚，思路清晰。小作者從不同角度（從過去到現(xiàn)在、從早晨到晚上、從課內(nèi)到課外）介紹了自己的校園生活，表達(dá)了對校園生活的熱愛之情。

需要修改的地方

①for 改為to。to someone 意為“對于某人來說”。

②his 改為their。結(jié)合上文the teachers，此處要用their。

③play 改為playing。have a great time doing something 意為“做某事很高興”。

評分

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25 分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得23 分。