李全忠

作者坐輪椅和自己的狗出去散步，在回程中突發(fā)事故，作者的輪椅翻倒并滾下路堤，掉進(jìn)了泥水里，作者右腿受傷，摔倒在地……

1 It was the 9th of January， a day I will remember for along time. It was a normal Sunday morning around 8：30 am，right on time for Sammys morning walk. I didnt walk becauseof my lameness， so I rode in my power wheelchair. We got outthe door and made our way towards a property near my apartmentcomplex. We got to the gate and out of the complex， andwe went left onto the extra wide sidewalk. It was about a mileswalk one way， passing a firehouse on the right side of the road，before we turned around and started back.

2 Along the path we took was a large plate over the sidewalk. I passed over it the firsttime without any problems. My wheelchair could reach up to 8 miles per hour， but we wenta little slower on our walks， around 2 miles per hour， so Sammy could keep up. Even so，this speed was pretty fast for a 15yearolddog.

3 As we turned around and made our way back， I passed over the sidewalk plate againexcept that this time it was moved without me realizing it， putting my wheelchair in thegrass on the embankment （路堤）. The next thing I knew， my wheelchair started to tip over，throwing me out of the chair and rolling down the embankment into the muddy water below.

4 My right leg was hurt， and I was unable to pull myself upright. I was too weak togather my strength to call for help. The muddy water was cold and I felt it hard to breathewith my body folded and twisted in a strange position. Meanwhile， Sammy was sitting up onthe sidewalk with his leash （鏈條） caught under the tipped over wheelchair. I heard him?barking louder than ever heard. He knew that I was hurt and was in danger.

5 By the way my wheelchair tipped over， a passerbyon the street would not be able tosee it from the road. All anyone could see was a dog barking on the sidewalk almost nightacross the street near the firehouse.

Reading Check

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。

Paragraph 1：

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Three firemen came to my dogs aid finally._____________________________________

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寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引

一、語(yǔ)篇研讀

（一）基本要素

（二）主題探索

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us？

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二、續(xù)寫(xiě)布局

根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段首句的內(nèi)容“我能看出來(lái)薩米是想幫我”可知，續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段可描寫(xiě)薩米想盡辦法尋求幫助。具體內(nèi)容我們可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈來(lái)展開(kāi)：

1. What did Sammy feel and what did he do？

2. How did I feel and what did I do？

3. What is the result？

根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段段首句的內(nèi)容“三個(gè)消防員終于來(lái)幫助我的狗了”可知，續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段可描寫(xiě)“我”和狗被救的過(guò)程。具體內(nèi)容我們可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈來(lái)展開(kāi)：

1. Where did the firemen do？

2. How did Sammy feel？

3. What lesson did I learn from this experience？

續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：狗叫—尋求幫助—被消防人員發(fā)現(xiàn)—被救—感悟

三、語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)

（一）詞塊

（二）句式

1. 并列句

My right leg was hurt， and I was unable to pull myself upright. （Para. 4）

The muddy water was cold and I felt it hard to breathe with my body folded and twisted in a strange position. （Para. 4）

2. 賓語(yǔ)從句

He knew that I was hurt and was in danger. （Para. 4）

3. 狀語(yǔ)從句

It was about a miles walk one way， passing a firehouse on the right side of the road，before we turned around and started back. （Para. 1）

As we turned around and made our way back， I passed over the sidewalk plate again except that this time it was moved without me realizing it， putting my wheelchair in the grass on the embankment. （Para. 3）

4. 定語(yǔ)從句

All anyone could see was a dog barking on the sidewalk almost night across the street near the firehouse. （Para. 5）

（三）即學(xué)即用

1. 設(shè)法常常表?yè)P(yáng)你的孩子，這樣你就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)他們樂(lè)意向你敞開(kāi)心扉。（使用并列句）

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2. 他說(shuō)你太小了，還不明白這件事，他被要求不告訴你。（使用賓語(yǔ)從句）

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3. 昨天離開(kāi)學(xué)校之前，我們打掃了教室。（使用狀語(yǔ)從句）

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4. 對(duì)于我的孩子們的未來(lái)，我唯一希望的就是他們能夠健康又快樂(lè)地成長(zhǎng)，并最終成為他們想要成為的人。（使用定語(yǔ)從句）

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四、續(xù)寫(xiě)技能

（一）讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)三大原則

1. 原文一致原則

內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。

2. 正能量原則（結(jié)局性）

故事內(nèi)容一定要有正能量，故事的結(jié)局是美滿的。如：迷路了，但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了，但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯(cuò)了，最后一定會(huì)改過(guò)自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法；等等。

3. 曲折性原則（過(guò)程性）

故事都是跌宕起伏的，其中的人物會(huì)遇到困難或問(wèn)題，但最終能解決。

（二）讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)四個(gè)步驟

1. 讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)

主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物、時(shí)態(tài)（通常是一般過(guò)去時(shí)）、事件（故事的起因和經(jīng)過(guò)）、語(yǔ)言特色（以便在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)保持語(yǔ)言特色前后一致）等。

2. 細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架

兩段首句定一框：由續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量：第二段的框架由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來(lái)確定。

3. 增加細(xì)節(jié)，開(kāi)始寫(xiě)作

在已定框架范圍內(nèi)，依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識(shí)，推斷故事中人物的所見(jiàn)、所聞、所思、所說(shuō)、所做等，給每段增加5～8個(gè)具體細(xì)節(jié)，我們稱(chēng)之為“五八細(xì)節(jié)添加法”。

4. 修改潤(rùn)色，整潔謄寫(xiě)

審讀初稿，注意語(yǔ)義是否銜接，前后是否連貫，事件是否符合邏輯，語(yǔ)言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤(rùn)色之后，整齊工整地謄寫(xiě)在答卷上。