My happy junior school life made me grow up and made me know whatfriendship is， what love is and what happiness is.

I still remember one afternoon last winter. Because"a bad cold， I had to beabsent from my classes and was in the hospital于for two weeks. I was so sad andworried about my study that I was in no mood to eat. However， to my surprised，my classmates took turns to come to see me. They cheered me up and helped mewith my study till I came back to school. Under the help of my classmates， Ibecame healthy quickly. More luckily， I didn’t fall behind others in study.

Because of friendship and love， I feel I have been the happiest boy in the pasttwo years. I’m lucky that I have a happy junior school life.

河北省阜城縣第四中學(xué) 劉立海

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張超 男，河北省衡水市阜城縣第四中學(xué)高級英語教師、縣骨干教師、市優(yōu)秀英語教師，從事英語教育教學(xué)工作30 多年；多年來，在省級以上報(bào)刊發(fā)表文章數(shù)百篇，并有多篇文章獲獎(jiǎng)；曾參與多本教輔資料的編寫工作；曾榮獲“中央教育科學(xué)研究所全國基礎(chǔ)教育科研先進(jìn)個(gè)人”榮譽(yù)稱號；曾多次輔導(dǎo)多名學(xué)生在市、省和國家級英語競賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。

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優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文小作者構(gòu)思巧妙，開篇以三個(gè)并列從句奪人眼球。多種短語及句型的恰當(dāng)使用，使文章亮點(diǎn)多多。

需要修改的地方：

①Because 改為Because of。because of 是介詞短語，后接名詞、代詞、動名詞等。

②in the hospital 改為in hospital。in the hospital 意為“在醫(yī)院里”，而inhospital 意為“生病住院”。

③surprised 改為surprise。to one’s surprise 是固定搭配，意為“令人驚奇的是”。

④Under 改為With。with the help of sb.是固定短語，意為“在某人的幫助下”。

評分：

按中考英語作文滿分20 分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得18 分。