張超

Dear Sam，

Im so glad to tell you something about our school， one of the most well-known schools in China.

Our school was founded in 1951. It lie① in the southeast of Hebei Province. It is famous in② its good quality in teaching. Now it has about 1，800 students who are working hard for our country. The number of teachers are③ more than 100. The teachers teach very well and work hard to help the students. During the past 60 years， a great number of students have graduated from our school. Many of them have made great successes in their own field. We are all proud for④ them.

I hope youll have a chance to visit our school in the near future.

Yours，

Zhang Qi

河北省阜城縣古城中學(xué)八年級(jí)（3）班 張琪

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3. 評(píng)分：

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