Do you like cartoons？ I am crazy about cartoons because they are very interesting and cartoon music listens① really great. I have a great time when I watch the cartoon films.

When I was a child， my mother and my grandmother showed me some cartoon books. When I was four years old， I could watch cartoons on TV and② I didnt understand them at all. When I was eight years old， I could understand some of the words in the cartoons. So I could understand lots of animals and people in the cartoons. Now， I am crazy with③ cartoons. I read comics and watch cartoon films during my holidays. I like drawing. So I want to draw people in the cartoons. I think I can draw them good④.

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

如今，喜愛動(dòng)畫的中學(xué)生越來越多，小作者許晴也不例外。她是一個(gè)動(dòng)畫迷，動(dòng)畫幾乎一直陪伴著她的成長(zhǎng)，陪她度過了一個(gè)美好的童年。小作者十分喜歡動(dòng)畫并想用畫筆把動(dòng)畫人物記錄下來。全文行文流暢、用詞得當(dāng)、思路清晰，是一篇不錯(cuò)的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①listens改為sounds。此處是系表結(jié)構(gòu)，sound是系動(dòng)詞，意為“聽起來”，great是形容詞做表語。

②and改為but。上下文是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系。

③with改為about。be crazy about意為“對(duì)……著迷”。

④good改為well。修飾動(dòng)詞draw應(yīng)使用副詞well。

3. 評(píng)分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分20分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得17分。