劉宇

My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the thing， I wanted to cry. But I didnt want to leted mother sad. So I went home and closed the door. Finally， her knowed the information. To my surprise， her didnt said nothing to me. I felt very warm.

文甜老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：該文通過(guò)回憶一件事來(lái)表達(dá)對(duì)媽媽的感激之情，整體上行文流暢，事件描述清楚，但過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)使用不準(zhǔn)確，尤其是動(dòng)詞的不規(guī)則變化錯(cuò)誤較多，人稱(chēng)代詞與物主代詞使用混淆，連詞使用也不夠準(zhǔn)確。另外，如果能再加上一些感激媽媽的具體行動(dòng)，文章就更完整了。

范文：

My mother is very strict with me， but she is also kind to me.

I remember when I was eight， I failed a math test. When I heard the news， I wanted to cry because I didnt want to make my mother sad. I went home sadly and closed the door. To my surprise， she didnt criticize me when she knew the truth. Instead， she smiled at me and encouraged me to do better next time. It made me feel warm and know how much she cares about me.

To thank her for her love， I will try my best to study harder and talk more with her. I will help her to do some housework so that she wont be too tired after work. I hope she can be healthy and happy every day！

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