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高考作文輔導(dǎo)——如何寫開放作文

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寫作練習(xí)

請結(jié)合下面的材料，按要求用英文寫作，詞數(shù)不少于100。

“Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration”

—Thomas Edison

要求

1 針對名言發(fā)表你的感想；

2 應(yīng)緊扣材料，有明確的觀點(diǎn)。

【參考范文1】

What Thomas Edison said suggests that it is not inspiration but hard work that leads to success. Some people think that many famous people have succeeded just because they were born with special talents. Actually, their success comes from hard work.

Take Thomas Edison for example. Though he studied in school for only three months because of poverty, he taught himself and learned a lot. He made more than 2,000 inventions in his life, some of which have greatly improved our life. While inventing the light bulb, Thomas Edison had tried more than 1,600 materials and failed, but he didn’t give up easily. It was his persistence and hard work that led to his final success. He set a good example to us all.

It is clear that hard work leads to success. If you are to make great contributions to society, you have to keep on trying until you succeed.

【范文剖析】

1．范文共分三個段落：第一段談了自己對寫作素材，即愛迪生名言的理解，并亮明自己的觀點(diǎn)——“成功不是靠特異功能，而是努力的結(jié)果”；第二段舉例證明自己的觀點(diǎn)。用美國著名發(fā)明家愛迪生做出眾多發(fā)明的例子，說明他的成功源自其堅(jiān)持不懈的努力；最后一段為結(jié)論段，總結(jié)前文，并得出結(jié)論：努力才能成功。如果你想有所做作為，就要刻苦努力。

2．第二段用Take Thomas Edison for example一句作為過渡語，使上下文巧妙地連接起來。愛迪生的例子恰恰證明了他的成功不是因?yàn)樗翘觳?，而是一步一個腳印踏實(shí)工作的結(jié)果。本段的舉例恰如其分地證明了第一段的論點(diǎn)。

3．第三段在第二段論述的基礎(chǔ)上得出結(jié)論, 不僅升華了主題，而且突出了中心，圓滿完成了寫作任務(wù)。

4. 短語亮點(diǎn)

not…but… 不是……而是……

come from 來自于

take…for example 以……為例

because of 由于

teach oneself 自學(xué)

give up 放棄

lead to 導(dǎo)致

set a good example to sb. 為某人樹立好榜樣

make contributions to 為……做貢獻(xiàn)

keep on doing sth. 一直做某事

5. 句子亮點(diǎn)

1) 主語從句和賓語從句： What Thomas Edison said suggests that it is not inspiration but hard work that leads to success.

2) 主語從句： It is clear that hard work leads to success.

3) 賓語從句和狀語從句： Some people think that many famous people have succeeded just because they were born with special talents.

4) 狀語從句： Though he studied in school for only three months because of poverty, he taught himself and learned a lot；If you are to make great contributions to society, you have to keep on trying until you succeed. 5) 定語從句： He made more than 2,000 inventions in his life, some of which have greatly improved our life;

6) 并列句： Thomas Edison had tried more than 1,600 materials and failed, but he didn’t give up easily.

7) 強(qiáng)調(diào)句式： It was his persistence and hard work that led to his final success.

【技巧點(diǎn)撥】

近年來，越來越多省份在高考中采用開放性作文。開放性英語作文的特點(diǎn)是，試題中沒有提供具體的寫作要點(diǎn)，僅僅提供了一幅漫畫、一句名言或是一個話題，要求考生在正確理解寫作素材的基礎(chǔ)上，自主確定寫作的內(nèi)容和主題。隨著試題開放性的不斷增強(qiáng)，高考書面表達(dá)對考生的寫作能力提出了更高的要求。一些考生覺得開放性作文比較難寫，原因在于沒有現(xiàn)成的寫作要點(diǎn)和提綱可以參考，考生需要自主確定寫作的內(nèi)容和主題。

那么，我們?nèi)绾螌懞瞄_放作文？首先，正確理解和分析寫作素材，確定寫作的話題和主題。其次，緊緊圍繞著寫作素材列出寫作提綱。然后，根據(jù)提綱展開寫作。

開放作文通常由三部分組成：首先談?wù)勛约簩λo材料的理解，包括字面意思和隱含意義。本段表明了短文寫作的主題和中心。然后，選取一個恰當(dāng)?shù)氖吕齺碇巫约旱闹行恼擖c(diǎn)。這樣的短文言之有物，內(nèi)容充實(shí)。最后，對前文進(jìn)行簡要的歸納和總結(jié)，得出結(jié)論，升華主題。

寫好開放性作文的關(guān)鍵是對寫作素材的分析和概括，只有確定了短文主旨大意，我們才不會寫跑題。如果理解不準(zhǔn)確，寫出的觀點(diǎn)就會與所給材料的內(nèi)容不符；如果概括不準(zhǔn)確，寫出來的短文的中心思想就會偏離材料的主旨。因此，考生應(yīng)準(zhǔn)確提煉出寫作素材的主旨要意，然后選取適當(dāng)?shù)睦觼碇巫约旱挠^點(diǎn)。最后一段首尾呼應(yīng)，再次表明觀點(diǎn)。

★ 寫開放作文可能用到的句式

1) 概括寫作材料用到的句式

I couldn’t agree with…more. 我完全同意某人的話……

As the saying goes… 正如俗話所說……

What someone says suggests that… 某人的話的含義是……

I totally agree with what…says. 我非常贊同……說的話。

The saying…reminds me of… ……這種說法讓我想到……

2) 結(jié)論段用到的句式

As is mentioned above… 正如前文提到的……

In summary/conclusion 總的來說

In short 簡言之

In my view/opinion 我認(rèn)為

It is clear/obvious/evident that… 顯然……

名師簡介

昝亞娟，河南師范大學(xué)教育碩士，河南省教師教育專家，首批中小學(xué)正高級教師。從事教育工作29年，其中25年擔(dān)任畢業(yè)班教學(xué)。在英語報(bào)紙雜志發(fā)表稿件一千多篇，為《英語周報(bào)》、《學(xué)生雙語報(bào)》、《學(xué)生英語報(bào)》、天星教育圖書公司特約作者，主編和參編英語教輔圖書八十多本。連續(xù)多年榮獲英語周報(bào)“金筆作者獎” 。

【訂正】

CE: Teens 2014年11月號“強(qiáng)調(diào)句與狀語從句辨析”一文中，P57的2005年山東高考題答案分析有誤，特此更正。

—_________ that he managed to get the information?（2005山東）

—Oh, a friend of his helped him.

A. Where was it B. What was it C. How was it D. Why was it

【名師點(diǎn)撥】根據(jù)答語“a friend of his helped him”可知，第一句問“他究竟是如何獲得了信息？”因此被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分為疑問詞how。我們先確定疑問詞用how，然后把題干變?yōu)殛愂鼍洌篒t was how that he managed to get the information. 然后，再把這個句子變?yōu)樘厥庖蓡柧?，我們就可以得出答案為C。