★2009年高考英語(江蘇卷)作文題目

第五部分:書面表達(滿分25分)

鼠標是計算機時代最佳的人機交互工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計算機操作。但是，過分依賴鼠標的習慣也會帶來一些不利影響。請你以鼠標為切入點，根據下表所提示的信息，用英語寫一篇短文。

注意:

1.對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。

2.詞數150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數。

3.作文中不得提及考生所在學校和本人姓名。

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

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學生習作與點評

學生習作

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

For most of us， the mouse is an indispensable device to operate the computer， 1surf in the internet and do other things. This little device， which is flexible and convenient， has obvious advantages. By using its functions of clicking， moving， inserting， copying， and deleting， we can edit text， browse the internet， and send and receive mails. We can also use it to shop 2on the line， listen to music， and download our favorite movies.

However， too much 3rely on the mouse will still bring some negative effects. For example， 4too easy ways to get too much ready information leaves us little room to judge them. Besides， too much 3rely on the mouse may give birth to laziness， which is the big enemy to our active thinking.

To sum up， as an important device， the mouse has both positive and negative effects; we should make the best of it and 5miximize its disadvantages.

原文修改稿

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

For most of us， the mouse is an indispensable device to operate the computer， surf the internet and do other things. This little device， which is flexible and convenient， has obvious advantages. By using its functions of clicking， moving， inserting， copying， and deleting， we can edit text， browse the internet， and send and receive mails. We can also use it to shop online (on the internet)， listen to music， and download our favorite movies.

However， too much reliance on the mouse will still bring some negative effects. For example， getting too much ready information easily leaves us little room to judge them. Besides， too much reliance on the mouse may give birth to laziness， which is a big enemy to our active thinking.

To sum up， as an important device， the mouse has both positive and negative effects; we should make the best of it and minimize its disadvantages.

◆整體點評

文章覆蓋了所有要點內容。在結構的組織上，作者很好地使用了語句連接詞，如 however、besides、to sum up 等，使文章流暢自然。同時，作者還注意了句型的變化，例如使用了介詞結構作狀語(By using its functions of clicking...， we can...)、非限定性定語從句作插入語(This little device， which is flexible and convenient， ...)等。另外，作者在文中也盡量使用一些高級詞匯和詞組，如indispensable、flexible、positive、negative、 rely on、 give birth to 等。以上這些說明作者的英文功底還不錯。但是，文中也出現了一些冠詞和詞匯使用錯誤，希望作者在日后的英語學習中加強語法知識和詞匯的學習。

◆難點分析

1. Surf表示“在……沖浪”之意時，為及物動詞，所以“在網上沖浪”應表述為surf the internet，而非surf in the internet。

2. 此處搭配錯誤，表達“網上購物”之意，應用shop online或 shop on the internet。

3. Rely用作不及物動詞，表示“依賴，信賴”之意，其名詞形式為reliance，此處too much修飾的名詞作句子主語，應改為reliance。下文中出現的rely同樣要改為reliance。

4.“too easy ways to get too much ready information”在這里表示不清晰，可改為getting too much ready information easily。

5. 詞匯拼寫錯誤。此處作者有可能是受到了表示“最大化”之意的詞maximize的影響，將“最小化”寫成了miximize，正確寫法應該是minimize。

參考范文

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer. For common people， 1it is impossible to operate the computer without the mouse， 2not to mention surfing the internet.

Because of its convenience and usefulness， the mouse has become an indispensable part of our life. By utilizing the functions of clicking， moving， inserting， copying， and deleting， we can not only edit text， search information and send and receive emails， but also can shop online， listen to our favorite music， and download the movies that we like.

However， 3each coin has two sides. Though the small device has simplified our daily life， too much reliance on the mouse makes people lazy and reluctant to learn new things. If something unexpects happens to the mouse， people do not know how to operate the computer at all by using the keyboard. Therefore， we also need to learn some simple operations using the keyboard， such as saving and copying a document， in case of the emergency.

◆參考句型

1.It is impossible to do sth.:it引導的形式主語從句，表示做某件事情是不可能的。

2.Not to mention:更不用說，更談不上，表示句意上的遞進，相當于let alone。

3. Each coin has two sides:習語，表示任何事情都有兩面性。

有用的表達方式

1. communicate v. 交流

Among the different kinds of bees， it is the honey-bee that has interested scientists most because of the \"language\" they use to communicate with each other.

It seemed that one bee was able to communicate the news of food to other bees in its hive.

2. indispensable adj. 不可缺少的

同義詞:essential

This book is indispensable to anyone interested in space exploration. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

Mobile phones have become an indispensable part of our lives. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

3. negative adj. 負面的

My drinking was starting to have a negative effect on my work. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

They have a uniformly negative image of the police. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

4. effect n. 結果，影響

Recently， the effect of computers and the Internet has given rise to the idea that we are living in the \"Information Age\".

搭配:have an effect on

We may think that what we do in our everyday life has no effect on big problems， such as environmental pollution. Nothing could be further from the truth.

5. rely on 依賴，依靠

同義詞組:depend on

Scientists often have to rely on government support in order to do research.

Many working women rely on relatives to help take care of their children. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

6. give birth to 出生，引起，產生

Kangaroos and koala bears give birth to very small and weak young.

The film gave birth to a TV show of the same name. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

提示:give birth to的本義為“生孩子”，但是人們也經常使用它的比喻義，即“產生某個新事物”。

7. minimize vt. 最小化

Every effort is being made to minimize civilian casualties. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

The rail company is bringing in more trains in an effort to minimize disruption to travellers. (朗文當代高級英語辭典)

(注:未標明出處的例句均選自高中課本)