廣東 程志麗
Marco 敏感害羞,膽怯少勇。然而,一通來(lái)自伯母Ginette 的電話鼓舞他站上演講臺(tái),面向公眾演講,改變自此開(kāi)始了……
1Sensitive,shy,and timid(膽怯的),Marco always wore turtleneck (高領(lǐng)套頭衫) shirts. To make it worse, Marco was naturally shorter than the other kids. And because his good marks had allowed him to skip second grade, he was younger than everyone else.However,this added nothing to his already low self-confidence.
2Marco's mother lost her life when Marco was very young.After that, Marco lived with his father. When Marco was eight, his father got promoted in office and became busier than before. Marco felt that his father had little time for him. He began to be afraid of coming home from school and sank into silent isolation every day,feeling unappreciated,inadequate,depressed and confused.
3When Marco was 14, his aunt Ginette called him one day in winter. To Marco, this seemed like a miracle, for she usually only called him once a year, on his birthday. She said that she had just seen some young teenagers participate in a public speaking contest—and she thought about him.She told him she firmly believed that he could perform on stage like the other kids, since she had seen him do skits (滑稽短劇) for the family during some festivals.
4Marco was startled, and not a little taken aback. In a public speaking contest? To agree would be contrary to his entirely shy,timid personality.But Aunt Ginette was so confident.She truly believed in him.And feeling her strong belief,Marco went against all odds and agreed to enter the contest.
All that winter,twice a week after dinner,he took three different buses in each direction for the three-hour round-trip to practice. Marco was taken by the energy he had never felt before. The hours and the obstacles no longer counted. Marco's father disapproved of his participation in the speaking contest, fearing it would take up his homework time. But Marco was a top performer in school and never missed a day.
6Four months later, the big night arrived. And of course, his aunt Ginette was in the audience.The nine other contestants were all older than Marco.Marco was overwhelmed—the whole thing just felt so much bigger than him,and butterflies filled his stomach.
閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。注意:
1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。Paragraph 1:
Hearing his name called,Marco stepped onto the stage.
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Paragraph 2:
As the winner,Marco went on to the regional final,where he won again!
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寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引
一、語(yǔ)篇研讀
(一)基本要素
Marco:sensitive,shy and 1. but was encouraged to go 2. all odds and Who participate in a public speaking contest Aunt Ginette:who 3. in Marco Marco's mother:who lost her life when Marco was very young Marco's father:who was busy with his work and had 4. time for Marco When Where What In the winter,when Marco was at the age of 5.In the place where Marco lived and studied Through the contest,Marco 6. to be better.Because Aunt Ginette thought he could make it in the contest,Marco participated in the contest.Why
(二)主題探索
What is the text about?And what does the author want to tell us through Marco's experience?
二、語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)
(一)詞塊
(二)句式
1.非謂語(yǔ)V-ing形式作狀語(yǔ),表示伴隨、原因等
He began to be afraid of coming home from school and sank into silent isolation every day,feeling unappreciated,inadequate,depressed and confused.(Para.2)
他開(kāi)始害怕放學(xué)回家,每天都陷入沉默的孤獨(dú)中,他感到不被賞識(shí)、自卑、沮喪和困惑。
And feeling her strong belief,Marco went against all odds and agreed to enter the contest.(Para.4)
感受到她深深的信任,Marco克服一切困難,同意參加比賽。
Marco's father disapproved of his participation in the speaking contest, fearing it would take up his homework time.(Para.5)
Marco的父親不同意他參加演講比賽,擔(dān)心那會(huì)占用Marco寫(xiě)家庭作業(yè)的時(shí)間。
2.原因狀語(yǔ)從句
To Marco, this seemed like a miracle, for she usually only called him once a year, on his birthday.(Para.3)
對(duì)Marco 來(lái)說(shuō),這似乎是一個(gè)奇跡,因?yàn)樗ǔC磕曛辉谒漳翘旖o他打一次電話。
She told him she firmly believed that he could perform on stage like the other kids,since she had seen him do skits for the family during some festivals.(Para.3)
她告訴他,她堅(jiān)信他可以像其他孩子一樣在舞臺(tái)上表演,因?yàn)樵谝恍┕?jié)日里她看到過(guò)他為家人表演滑稽短劇。
3.賓語(yǔ)從句
Marco felt that his father had little time for him.(Para.2)
Marco認(rèn)為他父親幾乎沒(méi)有時(shí)間陪他。
(三)即學(xué)即用
1.我瘋狂揮手,祈禱出租車停下來(lái)。(使用V-ing形式作狀語(yǔ))
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2.由于錢不夠,我們沒(méi)有買那些書(shū)。(使用原因狀語(yǔ)從句)
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3.我覺(jué)得做出這個(gè)決定沒(méi)有足夠的依據(jù)。(使用賓語(yǔ)從句)
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三、續(xù)寫(xiě)技能
(一)表達(dá)“緊張”的短語(yǔ)
感到緊張某種情感涌入通過(guò)動(dòng)作體現(xiàn)使用修辭be/feel nervous/anxious/tense/worried/stressed/uneasy/uncomfortable/restless/panicky tension floods over sb a flood of tension wells up inside sb/takes hold of sb/overtakes sb/overwhelms sb can't help trembling hold one's breath pace back and forth(restlessly)shiver with one's legs trembling shiver with one's palms sweating shiver with one's heart beating wildly shiver with one's heart in one's mouth feel like sitting on pins and needles as nervous as ants on a hot pan/a cat on hot bricks have/with butterflies in one's stomach
(二)表達(dá)“緊張”的句子
翻譯:我很緊張。
方法一:增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)。
1.站在舞臺(tái)上,她緊張到臉色發(fā)白、手發(fā)抖。
Standing on the stage,she was very nervous,her face white and her hands shaking.
Standing on the stage, so nervous was she that her face was white and her hands were shaking.
2.站在舞臺(tái)上,一陣緊張感突然襲來(lái),她的心都快跳出來(lái)了。
Standing on the stage, a flood of nervousness took hold of her, (with) her heart almost leaping out from her body.
方法二:使用特殊句式。
3.緊張不安,他在房間里來(lái)回踱步。(形容詞作狀語(yǔ))
Nervous and restless,he was pacing back and forth in the room.
4.是老師們的信任和鼓勵(lì)幫助我克服了緊張情緒。(強(qiáng)調(diào)句型)
It was the teachers' confidence and encouragement that helped me overcome my nervousness.
5.她很緊張,手心出了很多汗。(with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))
She felt extremely nervous with her palms sweating heavily.
6.第一次被要求翻譯報(bào)紙上的文章,他感到緊張,低著頭。(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ))
Required to translate articles in the newspaper for the first time, he felt nervous,lowering his head.
四、續(xù)寫(xiě)布局
文章最后一段末尾,Marco 不知所措,非常焦慮、緊張。根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的段首句“聽(tīng)見(jiàn)喊到他的名字,Marco 走上舞臺(tái)”和續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的段首句“作為獲勝者,Marco晉級(jí)到區(qū)域決賽,并再次獲勝!”可推測(cè),續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的內(nèi)容應(yīng)圍繞Marco 克服緊張并最終取得比賽勝利而展開(kāi)。寫(xiě)作時(shí),可結(jié)合原文對(duì)Marco 的相關(guān)描寫(xiě)來(lái)展開(kāi)。Marco敏感、害羞、膽怯,但是,伯母信任他,而且他自己堅(jiān)持訓(xùn)練,再加上曾經(jīng)表演過(guò)滑稽短劇,他有天賦和基礎(chǔ)。因此,續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段可著重描述Marco 從緊張到自信的變化。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展,可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈推測(cè):
1.How did Marco feel and what did Marco do?
2.What did Marco's aunt do?
3.How was Marco's speech?
根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的段首句“作為獲勝者,Marco 晉級(jí)到區(qū)域決賽,并再次獲勝!”,結(jié)合文章的主題——因?yàn)楸恍湃危琈arco 勇敢參賽,積極準(zhǔn)備,并最終贏得比賽,可推測(cè),續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段應(yīng)圍繞Marco 賽后獲得自信、重獲新生展開(kāi)。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展,可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈推測(cè):
1.What happened to Marco?
2.How did Marco change?
3.What did Marco think about confidence?