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（2022屆安徽合肥高三模考）假定你是高三學(xué)生李華，從網(wǎng)上得知英國牛津大學(xué)(the University of Oxford)將在暑假舉辦夏令營。 請寫一封電子郵件申請參加。 內(nèi)容主要包括：

1. 自我介紹(突出特長)；

2. 參加原因(文化交流、心儀大學(xué)等)；3. 希望獲批。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Sir or Madam,

Yours,Li Hua

佳作賞析1

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a senior three student from China. Having learned that a summer camp will be held by the University of Oxford①,I am writing to apply for a place②.

I believe my abilities make me stand out③. Participating in English speaking competitions④has given me strong communication skills. Therefore, I am able to speak English fluently.

This program attracts me for several reasons. First, it would encourage me to get to know the University of Oxford⑤.Second, I can attend cultural fairs and visit different cities,which would give me a better understanding of Western culture⑥.

I would treasure the chance to improve myself at the summer camp. I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours,Li Hua

亮點評析

①現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式Having learned...在句中作狀語，且其中含有that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，句式復(fù)雜多變。

②I am writing to... 句式點明寫信目的，apply for是表示“申請”的典型短語。

③“動詞+復(fù)合賓語”結(jié)構(gòu)make me stand out是地道的英語表達。

④Participating in...是動名詞作主語，是書面表達的高級句式。

⑤動詞不定式to get to know...表明申請原因。

⑥非限制性定語從句which would give...的使用，給文章添色不少。

佳句仿寫1

①他已經(jīng)失敗了兩次，不想再試了。 （現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式作狀語）

②知道你要申請進入我們大學(xué)，我很高興。 （apply for）

③雖然他曾經(jīng)常把他的小妹妹弄哭，但今天他被他的小妹妹弄哭了。 （make sb do/sb be made to do）

④要及時做好一切準備很難。 （動名詞作主語）

佳作賞析2

Dear Sir or Madam,

I'm Li Hua, a senior three student from China. Yesterday I happened to read①an advertisement from a website,saying that the University of Oxford will hold a summer camp②. I am interested in participating in③it.

As a high school student, I'm good at English and would like to make friends with teenagers around the world.The camp provides a good chance for me, where I can know more about other countries, and in turn tell foreign friends something about China④. Besides, I can get my English greatly improved⑤by communicating with foreign people.

I do hope that I can be admitted to the camp.⑥Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,Li Hua

亮點評析

①sb happened to do...是英語的常用句式，純正、地道。

②現(xiàn)在分詞短語saying that...作定語，其中的that引導(dǎo)一個賓語從句。

③participate in是表示“參加；參與”的經(jīng)典短語。

④where 引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句，使語言表達多樣化。

⑤“動詞+賓語+賓補”結(jié)構(gòu)使文章的表達靈動、活潑。

⑥do hope是強調(diào)句型的一種，表達了作者的強烈愿望；be admitted to是表達“被允許加入”的常用短語。

佳句仿寫2

①我昨天在回家的路上碰巧遇到他。 (sb happened to do)

②那天同我們講話的人去國外了。 （現(xiàn)在分詞作定語）

③我們要去武當(dāng)山參加太極夏令營。 （participate in）

④我們首先參觀了校園，在那里我們對這所大學(xué)有了一個大致的了解。 （where引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句）

※寫作指導(dǎo)

【命題分析】

本題采用了近年高考常用的應(yīng)用文體裁，要求寫一封申請參加夏令營的郵件，屬于英語書面表達中申請信的范疇。 寫作要點已經(jīng)給出，屬于提綱類作文。

該試題既考查考生對英語的實際運用能力，又考查考生對文化交流的理解。 本話題和體裁與考生的生活和學(xué)習(xí)緊密相關(guān)，實用性很強。 考生可以用和生活、學(xué)習(xí)密切相關(guān)的詞匯，運用合適的寫作技巧完成該作文。 因為本次的寫作任務(wù)是寫一封申請信，文章的時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時為主，人稱要用第一人稱。

【寫作導(dǎo)圖】

【經(jīng)典模版】

模版范文

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Li Hua, who is a Chinese student taking a summer course in London now. Knowing your art gallery will hold a Chinese painting exhibition and needs some volunteers, I'm writing to apply for the volunteer job.

As a Chinese, I'm interested in Chinese paintings and have a good knowledge of them. Meanwhile, I have studied English for 10 years, which makes my spoken English fluent. I can communicate very well with native English speakers. Besides, I'm so friendly and outgoing that I can easily get along well with the visitors.

If offered the chance, I wouldn't make you disappointed.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.Yours sincerely,Li Hua

【必備詞匯】

apply for 申請 application 申請

advertisement 廣告 on the Internet 在網(wǎng)上

advantage 優(yōu)勢 healthy and hard-working 健康且勤勞的

have a good knowledge of 通曉；精通 have no difficulty in 在……方面沒有困難

communicate with 溝通；交流 outgoing and optimistic 開朗且樂觀的

get along well with 與……相處融洽 position 位置；職位

summer camp 夏令營 show great interest in 對……表現(xiàn)出極大的興趣

appealing 有吸引力的 be suitable for 適合……的

be qualified for 有……資格 good personality 良好的性格

independent 獨立的 be of great use 很有用

opportunity/chance 機會 grateful 感激的；感謝的

live up to 不辜負 expectation 期待

look forward to 盼望；期待 take...into consideration 考慮到……

【提分靚句】

◎?qū)懶拍康?/p>

I'm writing to apply for a position in your summer camp.

我寫信來申請你們夏令營的一個職位。

I'm writing to tell you that I'm suitable for the job you are advertising for.

我寫信是想告訴您我很適合您征聘的這份工作。

The ad is really very appealing to me, so I'm now writing to you in the hope of filling in the job vacancy.

這則廣告非常吸引我，所以我寫信給您，希望能夠填補這個職位的空缺。

I would like to apply for it during this summer vacation because I think it is very useful to me.

我想在這個暑假期間申請這個職位，因為我認為它對我很有用。

I think it's of great use to me. For one thing, I can gain some experience for my future job; for another, I can make more friends.

我認為它對我是很有用的。 一方面，我能夠為未來的工作積累一些經(jīng)驗；另一方面，我可以交到更多的朋友。

◎個人優(yōu)勢

The following are my advantages.

以下是我的優(yōu)勢。

I have my advantages to be a member of your team.

我有我自己的優(yōu)勢，能成為你們團隊的一員。

In the first place, I have strong writing and communication skills.

首先，我有很好的寫作和交流技巧。

Last but not least, I have good personality, and I am independent in life.

最后但也是很重要的一點，我的性格很好，并且我在生活中很獨立。

I have teamwork spirit and can get on well with other people.

我有團隊精神，能與他人相處得很好。

◎希望獲批

I'd appreciate it if you could give me the opportunity.

如果您能給我這個機會，我將非常感激。

I will be much grateful if you can give me the opportunity.

如果您能給我這個機會，我會非常感激。

◎表達期待

I sincerely hope that my application could be favorably considered.

我真誠地希望我的申請能被積極地考慮。

I am sure that I can perfectly live up to your expectations.

我確信我能夠很好地達到你們的期望。

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

期待早日收到您的來信。

※即時訓(xùn)練

假定你是李華，在澳大利亞悉尼做交換生期間，得知該城市會展中心近日將舉辦中國絲綢展，需要志愿者講解。 請你寫一封信，申請做志愿者。 內(nèi)容包括：

1. 寫信目的；

2. 你的特長；

3. 表達期待。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)80左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：悉尼國際會展中心Sydney Convention and Exhibition Center

Dear Sir/Madam,

Yours,Li Hua