傅星宇

Last summer holiday， I went to Beijing and Zhangbei Grassland with my classmates. We? went there by train. We left Hefei in the night and got to Beijing the next morning.

On the first day， we went to Tian’anmen Square in the morning and in the afternoon we visited the Palace Museum. There were many different exhibits from the ancient times. We were excited because we had never seen them before. After that we also visited the Summer Palace and saw the Kunming Lake. How big and beautiful they are！

On the last day in Beijing， on the Great Wall we met several groups of tourists from different countries. We were so lucky because we wanted to try our English all the time， so some of my classmates began to talk with them. The Russian student tourists could speak a little Chinese， like “xiexie” and “zaijian”. So we were happy to take a group photos with them.

After we finished our trip in Beijing， we took the coach to Zhangbei Grassland. It was cooler there and its air was fresher than that of Beijing. During the trip in Zhangbei Grassland， we ate some delicious roast mutton and took part in some wonderful activities， such as watching fireworks and watching some traditional performances about Tie Muzheng.

The tour was interesting. On our way home， we still talked about the tour. It will be remembered by us forever.

教師點(diǎn)評：

這是一篇游記。全文按照旅游的時間和地點(diǎn)順序展開，脈絡(luò)清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，語言準(zhǔn)確，過渡自然。

如果小作者能在文章的最后小結(jié)一下旅游所帶來的知識增長、眼界開闊、身心放松等益處，文章就更完美。