安徽合肥第四十六中學(xué) 七年級（8）班 徐緯霄

First of all,let me introduce myself.I’m a student in Grade Seven.I’m energetic and humorous.I’m a good student at school.and I often get good scores in the examinations.At the same time,I have some hobbies.

I like singing,especially humming songs.But my voice is not good to listen to.It’s very low.Sometimes my classmates joke about it:“You sing like an old man.”But I think it is just very special.Maybe I haven’t found the right way to sing.I think we shouldn’t worry it’s not good enough to listen to,just sing.

I like reading as well,especially the novels and biographies of famous people.I’m really interested in reading books.But I always read in bed.It’s bad for my eyes.So I’m near-sighted now.This is a bitter lesson for me.I hope everybody reads in right postures.

I’m also good at playing the piano.I have begun to learn it since I was five.I’m still learning it.At first,I didn’t like the heavy and difficult training.It was boring.I thought playing the piano is awful.But I didn’t give up.When I could play the piano well,I was proud and pleased.I won many prizes in piano competitions.I come to like it very much.So I think if a man is interested in something,he shouldn’t give it up.They will become his advantages.

Afterall,everyone should have theirown hobbies.All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.Hobbies make us grow as a person.Hobbies will change into our habits.Keep them,we’ll be the winner.

教師點評：

這是一篇七年級下學(xué)期學(xué)生的作品。文章文風(fēng)樸實，層次清晰，過渡自然。作者首先開門見山地點出主題，表明自己不光學(xué)習(xí)成績好，還有一些愛好；接著從唱歌、閱讀、彈琴三個方面展開具體敘述；最后升華主題，說明愛好能使得一個人成長為全面的人，并受益終生。

當(dāng)然，如果作者能將愛好與未來的工作結(jié)合起來，文章將會更加完美。