石繼忠

Do you like pop music？ I like it very much. Which pop star do you like best？ I like Han Hong. She sings very good①. I think she is the best singer in China.

Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well. So I dont like them. If a singer sings very well， he will have a lot of fans， even though he is not handsome. If a singer sings well and has good looking② at the same time， it will be perfect. He must be well loved by his fans. Such singers are Song Zuying， Emil Wakin Chau， Jay Chou， Andy Lau and so on.

Pop music is popular among young people all over the world. It can even make you to③ forget your unhappiness， worries and anger. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a long life.

山東梁山揚營中學(xué)八年級（6）班 王慶彬

點評

1. 優(yōu)點：

該文章寫的是作者對流行音樂的喜愛，并對流行音樂及歌手的實力與相貌發(fā)表了自己的看法。全文結(jié)構(gòu)安排合理，語句通順，層次清晰。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①good改為well。修飾動詞用well。

②looking改為looks。looks意為“外貌”。

③去掉to。make sb. do sth.意為“使某人做某事”。

④to改為for。be good for意為“對……有好處”。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。endprint