學(xué)生風采展示板

New Year Plans

A New Year begins and it is just the right time to make a plan. The followings are the plans made by my parents and me for the new year.

My plan is to study harder. It doesn’t sound interesting at all, but I know it will be the best plan because it is made by me.

My mother plans to learn how to sing better. She has always been interested in singing. I am sure the better she can sing, the more colorful her life will be.

My father has made an amazing plan. He is going to exercise more to keep healthy. I couldn’t believe it when I frst heard his plan. But I am happy, because everyone wants a healthy father.

廣州市廣園中學(xué) 初二（4）班 劉雅軒

A Survey

Nowadays, almost all students surf the Net every day. To fnd out what they do and how long they spend on it each day, we did a small survey a few days ago.

The survey shows that up to 80% of the students surf the Net every day. Most of them spend about an hour but some say they spend two hours or more surfng the Net! That is quite a lot of time!

For things to do online, most students like to listen to music, watch movies, play games or chat with friends. But we also found out that some students like to get homework answers online. I think it is really bad.

Without question, Internet can be a big help to our studies and in our daily life. But we should learn to use it in a wise way.

廣州市第十七中學(xué) 初二（1）班 潘世康

Benson老師點評：

英語作文是中學(xué)生的一大痛點。很多學(xué)生在表達、句式和結(jié)構(gòu)上都感到力不從心。他們在表達上有口難言，不知道該說些什么；在句式上捉襟見肘，總想不出可用、合用、會用的；而在結(jié)構(gòu)上就往往顧此失彼，無法形成一個整體。

而本期的這兩篇習(xí)作在處理上述問題時就做得相當好。

在“New Year Plans”中，小作者使用了一個總句起篇“A New Year begins…”，然后用三個分句“My plan is…”“My mother plans to…”“My father has made…”各自引出一家三口的新年計劃。這在結(jié)構(gòu)上十分清晰明了。

在句式上，小作者能夠靈活使用不同的句式，既避免了雷同句式給人帶來的閱讀枯燥感，更表現(xiàn)了其優(yōu)秀扎實的英語基本功。

在表達上，小作者也熟練地應(yīng)用了“先否后肯（It doesn’t sound…but…）”“展開遞進（She has always been…the better…the more colorful…）”“設(shè)懸念（…an amazing plan…I couldn’t believe…）”等方式去開展描寫，使文章讀來流利自然。

在“A survey”中，小作者均以一個精短的句子作為每段的結(jié)尾，如“we did a small survey…”“That is quite a lot of time!”“I think it is really bad.”和“But we should learn to use it in a wise way.”等。這既是小作者的個人觀點，也是對每段的一個總結(jié)，非常有力地支撐起了全文的結(jié)構(gòu)。

Benson（范老師，微信號：xiaoaogz）：《瘋狂英語》教學(xué)顧問、“突破英語”首席培訓(xùn)師、“《瘋狂英語》（廣州）校園行”主講講師。

范老師曾是中高考英語都不及格的典型英語“學(xué)渣”，后自學(xué)《瘋狂英語》等系列書刊成功“逆襲”。其在全國知名培訓(xùn)機構(gòu)授過課、還在知名大學(xué)教過書。自2005年起，范老師一直在廣州專注英語教學(xué)實踐和研究。他也在小初高等級別都培養(yǎng)出了眾多同齡人中的頂尖學(xué)員。

歡迎同學(xué)們將自己的英語作文發(fā)送到范老師的郵箱—513259326@qq.com。范老師將會選擇其中的優(yōu)秀習(xí)作進行點評，并將其刊登在本刊的“學(xué)生風采展示板”上。