張藝茹

Each student has their unforgettable lesson. I have ever had so many lessons，but in my memory only one lesson made me excited and until now I can remember it clearly.

That was an English lesson. Our English teacher held a competition. We were all very interested in it. He divided us into two groups—the girl team and the boy team. The rules are： the teacher will give us many kinds of questions， such as making up a dialogue，putting a sentence or a phrase into English，guessing a puzzle，writing a short passage， and so on. Then the students will write the answers down on their exercise book and stand up as soon as possible. If the first one who stands up has the right answer，the teacher will give him different marks. Each person only has two chances to answer questions.

At the beginning， the girl team did very well. Li Yan was the first to get the chance and her answer was right，so we got ten points. The second question was to write a phrase， Yue Liang stood up very quickly and all of us were surprised. Unluckily she was wrong. But she didnt lose her heart. The next question，she got twenty points. In the competition， I made a foolish mistake. The question was to make a dialogue according to a picture in the book，there were several boats in the picture and the boats look like chickens，but chickens cant swim. I wrote the ducks couldnt swim，it made the teacher and the students laugh. Then the boys did better than us. They stood up so quickly that the girls were very nervous. Their marks were much more than ours. In the end the boys won.

Although we lost， we still love the lesson. We think we should study harder and harder later on. All of us enjoy this kind of lesson and look forward to the next one.

簡評：

這是一篇很優(yōu)秀的隨筆。文章條理清晰，詳略得當(dāng)，運(yùn)用了很多重點(diǎn)短語、復(fù)合句，使文章上了一個(gè)檔次。文章中的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使用恰當(dāng)，有利于上下文銜接。作者對“課堂”細(xì)節(jié)生動地加以描述，給人以很強(qiáng)烈的畫面感。如果作為考試中的命題作文，則需要在文字的運(yùn)用上再下功夫，使文章更加精煉，從而符合考試作文字?jǐn)?shù)方面的要求。

指導(dǎo)教師：王寶祥