劉雨舟

My classroom is very good. Because my classroom is cool on summer. I like my desk and chair very much. Because they help me a lot. I have many good sentences on my desk. For example， “No rules no games.” When I was tired， Im thinking these sentences. They talked me that I cant fall asleep. Because I must study hard. Now， I have to leave here. I will remember my desk and my chair. Because they are my friends.

Bob老師點評：這篇文章學(xué)生描述了喜歡教室的什么以及離開教室的感受，思路基本清晰，作為考場作文，基本上達到了要求。但缺乏對教室的整體描述，要是有從整體到細節(jié)的描述就更好。另外要避免謂語動詞、連詞、介詞等的常見錯誤（斜體部分）。

范文：

There are forty desks in my classroom. In every desk there are many books. On the wall there are educational pictures. The floor is very clean. There is a TV set in the front of the classroom.What is different from others is our class motto： Study hard， play hard. Enjoy study， enjoy life. I like the motto best， because it makes us know how to live a happy and efficient life. Saying goodbye to the classroom is the wonderful beginning of a new life. At this point I will say： Enjoy saying goodbye， enjoy new life.