姚坤濰

Everyone has their own duties. They need to obey their own rules. As a student， what should we do？

In my opinion， we need to be polite at school. Its common that students always say dirty words. Its very impolite. And the people will feel uncomfortable. So were not supposed to do it. To be a polite student， we are expected to help our classmates in need. You can also feel happy for it， too. Second， were not expected to talk loudly in public， especially in the libraries， restaurants and so on. It can be a noise for others. Third， I think the most important one is to be honest to our parents at home. If you always tell lies， they wont believe you at last. Then you may feel lonely and sad.

If you obey these rules， you may be a polite student.

朱志蘭老師點評：這篇文章的主題“禮貌”二詞比較抽象，不太好理解。應該從學生面對不同的人和場合時如何做到禮貌待人這一點來入手。這篇文章結構很完整，嚴格地按照中考的作文要求分為三段，分別從學校、公共場所和家庭三個場所詮釋了如何禮貌待人，每個段落的主題句也很明顯。不足之處在于，審題立意在最后稍有偏差，“誠實”似乎和“禮貌”有點距離。而且句式多為簡單句，很少用到復合句。

范文：

As a student， it is very important for us to be a polite person. But what shall we do？

First， we should treat our parents politely. We should answer them immediately when they talk to us. Dont shout at them when they have different opinions. Share some housework like doing the dishes.

Second， we should greet the teachers， and bow when seeing them in the hallways. Never should a student argue with the teachers. Of course， students should also treat each other politely.

Other people such as the elders should also be treated politely. It is a students duty to help them， like sharing seats.

In short， a polite person can make a difference in our society. Lets start to be polite today！

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英語作文不同于漢語作文，我們主要是要按照要求用英語寫出準確的句子。為減少失誤，應盡量使用簡單句，即一個句子一主語一謂語，同時注意but、and等連接詞的使用，還要注意主謂一致和固定短語、句型的靈活運用。