李袁彧

Dear Linda，

Long time no see！ I miss you very much.

I am taller and healthier now than I was two years ago. I spend less time playing the computer games. Most of the time， I read and study. It helps me to get better grades. I also made many new friends because I am more outgoing now than before.

I will live every day of my life with absolute passion. How about you？ Please reply to me as quickly as possible. Give me a visit if you are free.

Yours

Alice

彭小雙老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：這篇文章的主題是以書(shū)信的格式比較現(xiàn)在的自己和兩年前的變化，重點(diǎn)練習(xí)比較狀語(yǔ)從句。作者立意明確，從學(xué)習(xí)和交友兩個(gè)方面來(lái)描述了自己的變化，書(shū)信格式也很工整。但老師認(rèn)為還可以從課外生活這方面來(lái)補(bǔ)充描述，并利用更多復(fù)合句來(lái)補(bǔ)充句子的定狀補(bǔ)成分，讓句子更加豐盈。

范文：

Dear Linda，

Long time no see！ How is everything going with you？ I am very happy to share something about my new school life with you.

I am taller and healthier than I was two years ago. In order to get better grades， I spend less time playing computer games. Most of the time， I read books and write stories， which can make my life easier later. Of course， I also play sports three times a week after class， to improve the physical and mental health. Whats more， I have more friends now because I am more outgoing and more friendly than before.

I will live every day to the fullest and I really enjoy my school life. How about your？ If you are available， I hope we can play together this autumn.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours

Alice