王思成

If an old man falls down， will you help him with your hands？ There are probably two opinions in our life.

One is that we should help the old man stand first because being glad to help others is a Chinese traditional virtue. Everyone needs help when they get in the troubles. The other is that we neednt help the man at once： we are supposed to call 120 or 110 first of all. But I agree with the first opinion more. We all know the saying “I do for everyone， everyone does for me”. If we dont help others， why need others help us when we are in the same situation？

Everyone should be responsible for the society， shouldnt we？

張穩(wěn)花老師點評：本文針對當(dāng)前“老人摔倒扶或不扶”的熱議話題提出自己的觀點，句式多變，條理清楚，不失為一篇好文章。文章雖有些短語使用不夠準(zhǔn)確，引用的名言也不太地道，但瑕不掩瑜。

范文：

If an old man falls down， will you help him with your hands？ There are probably two opinions in our life.

One is that we should help the old man stand up first because being glad to help others is a Chinese traditional virtue. Everyone needs help when they get into trouble. The other is that we neednt help the man at once， we are supposed to call 120 or 110 first for help. But I agree with the first opinion more . We all know the saying “One for all， all for one.” If we dont help others， why will others help us when we are in the same situation？

Everyone should be responsible for the society， shouldnt we？

相關(guān)鏈接：一篇好的英語作文，除了句式多變、條理清楚、內(nèi)容完整外，還要注意一些細(xì)節(jié)的東西，如主謂一致、名詞的單復(fù)數(shù)要準(zhǔn)確等，還要使用地道的英語，不能是Chinglish。