【情景導(dǎo)入】

眼睛，是“心靈的窗戶”。它能讓我們分辨美與丑，善與惡。能讓我們看到樹是多么的綠；花兒是那么的艷。這時，你就會感覺到世界是多么美好的呀！愛護你的眼睛吧！把擁有眼睛的每一天，看作是你將失去光明的前一天。最后，愛護眼睛，人人有責(zé)。

【作文要求】

六月六日是“全國愛眼日”。請你結(jié)合實際寫一篇題目為《如何保護眼睛》的征文稿，內(nèi)容要包括：

1. 保護眼睛的重要性；

2. 保護眼睛的具體措施；

不要長時間看書報；

不要在太強或太弱的光線下看書；

堅持做眼保健操。

注意：詞數(shù)80～100詞；不要逐條翻譯，可適當發(fā)揮。

【佳作欣賞】

一

How to Protect Our Eyes

It’s important for everyone to keep good eyesight. But now more and more students wear glasses. They can see the blackboard clearly with the help of glasses.

So we must do something to protect our eyes. When you read books or newspapers for about an hour， you must stop to have a rest. Don’t read in dim light or in the sun. Reading in a moving car is also bad for your eyes. Doing eye-exercises is another way to protect your eyes. Remember to do eye-exercises every day. You’d better not stay up late， or your eyes can’t get a good rest.

As the saying goes： Eyes are the windows of our mind. Let’s protect our eyes from now on.

【作文點評】

該文信息表達全面，第一段寫了眼睛的重要性及不保護眼睛的后果。第二段So we must do something to protect our eyes 很自然地引出下文?！盌oing eye-exercises is another way to protect your eyes”一句使文章增色不少。連詞的使用使文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹緊湊。短語使用得當。

二

How to Protect Our Eyes

Eyes are windows of the soul. It’s very important for everyone to keep good eyesight. Here’s some advice on how to protect our eyes.

Firstly， you shouldn’t read books or newspapers for a long time. When reading， you should keep the book about one foot away from your eyes. Secondly， don’t read in dim light or in the sun. Thirdly， remember to do eye-exercises every day， which can help you keep good eyesight.

I’m sure you’ll have bright eyes， if you obey the rules above.

【作文點評】

該文的用語簡潔明了，思路清晰?！盚ere’s some advice on how to protect our eyes”引出下文，過渡自然?！盕irstly， Secondly， Thirdly”的使用，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，條理自然。沒有遺漏要點。

三

How to Protect Our Eyes

We all know that eyes are the window of the soul. We see nothing without eyes. So eyes are very important for us. We must protect them carefully. Do you know how to protect you eyes？

First， don’t keep your eyes working for a long time. You’d better have a rest after you have studied for about an hour. Second， don’t read in a strong or poor light. Reading in bed or in a morning car is also bad for your eyes. At last， remember to do eye-exercises every day.

If you keep on doing so， your world will be colorful for ever.

【作文點評】

該文開篇直接點題，“We see nothing without eyes”說明眼睛的重要性。利用一個問句“Do you know how to protect your eyes？” 引出下文，行文流暢。有效地使用連詞，如：”first， second， third， or”等來分步寫出保護眼睛的措施。全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，要點全面，句式多變，完全達到了預(yù)期的寫作目的。