本期點(diǎn)評(píng)名師

Dear Mr.Xu,

I am writing to you to ask for a sick leave.

Last Saturday I went to visit my dear aunt and I was caught in the rain on the way to home①.That night I had a headache.My father took my temperature and found I had got a high fever.He took me to see a doctor the next day.The doctor said I had a bad cold and asked me to stay in bed two days②.So I can’t come to school today and I can’t take part in the football match to be held on Tuesday,too③.I will be very thankful to you that④you give me a kind understanding.

Your student,

Li Yanyan

河北省阜城縣古城中學(xué)九年級(jí)（2）班 李巖巖

1.優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文是一張病假條，屬于應(yīng)用文體裁。本文寫(xiě)作格式正確，語(yǔ)言流暢，條理清晰，語(yǔ)句通順。在正文中小作者把請(qǐng)假的原因及時(shí)間描述得十分清楚。

2.需要修改的地方：

①to home應(yīng)改為home。home在此處是副詞，其前面無(wú)需加介詞to。

② two days應(yīng)改為for two days。時(shí)間段前面通常要用介詞for。

③too應(yīng)改為either。too一般用于肯定句，而either一般用于否定句。

④that應(yīng)改為if。分析句意可知這里應(yīng)是一個(gè)由if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句。

3.評(píng)分：

按照中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分20分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得17分。