浙江省青田縣溫溪鎮(zhèn)第一中學九年級12班 鄭培森

Chen Binqiang lives in Pan’an County in South China’s Zhejiang Province.His father died in a traffic accident when he was only eight years old.His mother raised the three children all alone.Six years ago,his mother gotAlzheimer(老年癡呆癥).As a middle school teacher,he fastens the two of them together while riding his motorbike to go to work.He takes good care of his mother.He is very great.I think everyone should learn from him and respect our parents.On Mother Day’s Eve,let’s do something meaningful for our parents.Let’s do the housework,do some washing and cleaning and so on.Would you like to tell your mother that you love her very much?Or would you like to give her a greeting card?This is a very good way to show our love to her.

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陳斌強作為2012年感動中國的十大人物之一，孝敬母親，本文就敘述了他的事跡。描寫他的經(jīng)歷時，時態(tài)運用得當，一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時轉(zhuǎn)換得很好。然后用I think...作為過渡句，引出去尊敬母親，為母親做事情。全文條理清楚，一氣呵成，層次分明，長短句運用得當，是一篇優(yōu)秀的學生習作。