Today is my birthday.

I am too excited to sleep for a long time.

So I get up early. I see a big cake on the table.

I call my friends and invite them to my party.

After a while， my friends are all here.

Then， my birthday party starts.

My mother turns off the lights. My father lights the candles. The candles are bright.

All my friends sing the birthday song to me.

江蘇省蘇州高新區(qū)白馬澗小學(xué)四（16）班 申孝賢

指導(dǎo)老師 趙 庭：

李梓晨是按照時(shí)間先后順序，介紹自己生日派對上的一些活動，例如收禮物、吃蛋糕、拍合影等；申孝賢對情緒的描寫非常細(xì)膩，例如生日前的激動心情、燭光，以及關(guān)燈許愿的細(xì)節(jié)等。兩位同學(xué)都表達(dá)出了對家人和朋友的感恩之情。