Do you know anything about Chinese knots? I will tell you something aboutthem. In China people usually do淤them with red silk, cloth and other materials.They look very beautiful in the shape of diamond. In China, these knots stand forfriendship, love and good luck. People can either give them as gifts to friends orhang them in houses as decorations. Besides, I want to say I爺m good in于makingChinese knots. If anyone in your country want盂to know more about Chineseknots, let them write to me. I will try my best to introduce my Chinese knots toanyone who is interested in Chinese culture.
河北省阜城縣第四中學(xué)息秋晗
優(yōu)點(diǎn):
本文向外國朋友介紹了中國的傳統(tǒng)文化———中國結(jié)。文章語言通順、意思連貫、要點(diǎn)齊全、條理清楚、書寫規(guī)范。
需要修改的地方院
①do 改為make。do 通常用于表示工作、活動(dòng)、行為或任務(wù),強(qiáng)調(diào)工作的具體內(nèi)容;而make 表示制作、創(chuàng)造,強(qiáng)調(diào)創(chuàng)造的過程和結(jié)果。
②in 改為at。be good at 是固定短語,意為“擅長(zhǎng)于”。
③want 改為wants。不定代詞anyone 用作主語時(shí),謂語動(dòng)詞應(yīng)使用第三人稱單數(shù)形式。
評(píng)分:
按中考英語作文滿分20 分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn),本文修改前可得17 分。