主持人：祖瑞 正高級(jí)教師，江蘇省特級(jí)教師，任教于江蘇省南京市將軍山中學(xué)

Reading

Everyone has friends.On the road of life,we need not only the company of family members,but also the encouragement and help of friends.Only with friends can we have a perfect life.

About friends,we usually think that those who can face difficulties together are true friends.When we are in trouble,friends will help us out.When we are down,our friends cheer us up.

Most of our friends are human beings,but we also make friends with animals and even things.For example,many of us have pets,and we all have favourite objects such as a lucky pen or a diary.Chuck has an unusual friend.Who or what is it?Read and verify your prediction.

In the movieCast Away（《荒島余生》）,Tom Hanks plays a man named Chuck Noland.Chuck is a businessman who is always so busy that he has little time for his friends.He is a successful manager in a company that sends mails all over the world.One day Chuck is on a flight across the Pacific Ocean when suddenly his plane crashes（墜毀）.Chucksurvives the crashesand lands on a deserted island.On the island,Chuck has to learn tosurvive all alone.He has to learn how to collect water,hunt for food,and make fire.Perhaps the most difficult challenge ishow to survive without friends.In order to survive,Chuck develops a friendship with an unusual friend—a volleyball he calls Wilson.Chuck learns a lot about himself when he is alone on the island.He realizes that he hasn’t been a very good friend because he has always been thinking about himself.During his five years on the island,Chuck learns how to be a good friend to Wilson.Even though Wilson is just a volleyball,he becomes fond of him.He talks to him and treats him as a friend.Chuck learns that we need friends to share happiness and sorrow,and that it is important to have someone to care about.He also learns that he should have cared more about his friends.When he makes friends with Wilson,he understands that friendship is about feelings and that we must give as much as we take.

Tasks

1.Read and pay attention to the expressions in bold.Try to understand the meaning of the word“survive”.

2.About friends,we usually think that thosewho can face difficulties togetherare true friends.句中的畫線部分是一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句，做think 的賓語(yǔ)，而賓語(yǔ)從句中的黑體字部分又是定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞those，意思是“能夠一起面對(duì)困難的（那些人）才是真朋友”。文中還有一些賓語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句，請(qǐng)嘗試找出來(lái)。

3.Can you understand the last sentence?Discuss it with your classmates.

Writing

We have many kinds of friends in our lives,the best friends,the closest friends,forever friends,loyal friends,creative friends,supportive friends,inspiring friends and so on.Please write an article titled“My _______ friend”.

原文呈現(xiàn)

My best friend

What makes the best friends? Some people say there should be no secrets between the best friends,while others think the best friends should be loyal and shouldn’t say bad words about each other.I think my best friend Lily has already told me about it through her actions.

Lily always helps me when I have some questions.I still remember last month,one of the maths problems was too difficult for me to find out the answer.Lily was busy with her own homework at that moment,but she still taught me how to figure out the answer.Don’t you think she’s a warm-hearted girl?

在學(xué)習(xí)上互相幫助是好朋友之間最常見的方式。既然是最好的朋友，就要有特別的，能真正體現(xiàn)“warmhearted”的例子。

Lily is also generous and shares her things with us.One day,I went to school in a hurry and forgot to take my pencil case.Lily shared hers with me without a single word when she heard this.When I thanked her,she told me that was what a best friend should do.

細(xì)節(jié)可以突出人物形象，建議增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫。

Lily is interesting too and often tells some funny jokes.We have the similar hobbies and we often talk about our hobbies to get some suggestions from each other.

這里兩句關(guān)聯(lián)度不高。建議選擇一個(gè)方面來(lái)寫。

I have learnt a lot from Lily since we became friends.Lily is my best friend and I hope our friendship will last forever.

升格展示

My best friend

What makes the best friends? Some people say there should be no secrets between the best friends,while others think the best friends should be loyal and shouldn’t say bad words about each other.I think my best friend Lily has already shown me about it through her actions.

Lily always helps me when I have some problems.I still remember last month,I got a stomachache at school and had to go back home.When I felt better,it has been already very dark outside and too late for me to go to school and pack all my things back.Just then,I heard someone knocking at the door.I opened the door and found Lily standing there with a bag which are full of my books.“Don’t be worried,I have already packed all the things for you.”she said,with a smile.I thanked her very much.Don’t you think she’s a helpful and warm-hearted girl?

Lily is generous and always shares her things with us.One day,I went to school in a hurry and forgot to take my pencil case.Lily shared her new pens with me without a single word.She said that I could use her things whenever I needed.When I thanked her,she told me that this was what the best friends should do.

Lily is also talkative and humorous.She often offers me some suggestions about the hobbies that we both love.When I am in low spirits,she always tells funny jokes and makes me laugh.I really enjoy her company.

I have learnt a lot from Lily since we became friends.Lily is my best friend and I believe our friendship will last forever.

（江蘇省南京市將軍山中學(xué) 黃茹一）

綜合點(diǎn)評(píng)

小作者選取三個(gè)“典型行動(dòng)”生動(dòng)形象地把自己最好的朋友呈現(xiàn)到讀者面前。修改后的作文抓住描寫人物的關(guān)鍵之處——細(xì)節(jié)來(lái)刻畫人物形象，即便是最微小的細(xì)節(jié)，也能體現(xiàn)出深刻的含義。細(xì)節(jié)的刻畫并不僅僅追求副詞的運(yùn)用，而且通過句式的變化和描寫的手法來(lái)體現(xiàn)，展示了小作者豐富而厚重的閱讀積累。