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小女孩Cindy在校沒有朋友，一次偶然的機(jī)會，“我”保護(hù)了她，她向“我”詢問她交不到朋友的原因，“我”該如實相告嗎？Cindy的生活會有變化嗎？

1 Last year there was a girl at our school who hardly talked to anyone. I think it was because she seldom showered， and she smelled kind of bad. Her name was Cindy Lindburg. I didnt know exactly where she lived， but it must have been somewhere in the neighborhood because we always got on the school bus at the same bus stop.

2 Cindy Lindburg didnt have many friends. She always came to the lunch room alone and left alone. On the bus， no one offered her a seat， and she never asked if she could share a seat with others. I thought that maybe it was because she was sort of a shy person. She seemed like a nice girl， who had an odor （氣味） problem.

3 One day， I was walking up to the bus stop and I saw Carl Littleton making fun of her. I couldnt hear what he was saying， but I saw him laughing and rolling his eyes in his typical poking?fun?at?you way. I also saw how sad it made Cindy. Holding her notebook tightly to her chest like a shield， she stared at the ground and moved as far away from him as possible without leaving the bus stop entirely. As soon as I got close enough， I glared at Carl to make him stop laughing—even though I knew he probably wouldnt. He didnt， so I walked over and stood closer to Cindy so she wouldnt feel quite so bad. It was just one of those times when you just knew someone needed someone to be a friend.

4 I didnt think shed say anything， but she did. Her eyes peeked （偷看） up from staring at the ground and as though she thought Id be embarrassed if anyone heard her speaking to me， she whispered “Hi”.

5 “Hi，” I said. Then as loudly as I could， I said， “Dont pay any attention to Carl. His parents have been unsuccessful in teaching him some manners.”

6 Some of the kids standing there laughed. The comment didnt even rouse （喚醒） a smile out of Cindy. By now everyone there was talking with a friend. Quietly， and with a serious look on her face， Cindy said， “Why dont I have any friends？”

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

Her question took me by surprise.

Paragraph 2：

I was a little bit relieved since she seemed to take this well.

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

（一）基本要素

（二）主題探索

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us？

二、語言學(xué)習(xí)

（一）詞塊

[Expressions Chinese meanings 1. kind of 2. share sth with sb 3. make fun of 4. roll ones eyes 5. poke fun at 6. hold sth tightly to the chest like a shield 7. glare at/stare at 8. peek up 9. pay attention to 10. be unsuccessful in doing sth ]

（二）句式

1. 定語從句

Last year there was a girl at our school who hardly talked to anyone. （Para. 1）

She seemed like a nice girl， who had an odor problem. （Para. 2）

It was just one of those times when you just knew someone needed someone to be a friend. （Para. 3）

2. 賓語從句

I think （that） it was because she seldom showered， and she smelled kind of bad. （Para. 1）

I didnt know exactly where she lived. （Para. 1）

She never asked if she could share a seat with others. （Para. 2）

I couldnt hear what he was saying. （Para. 3）

3. 表語從句

I think （that） it was because she seldom showered， and she smelled kind of bad. （Para. 1）

I thought that maybe it was because she was sort of a shy person. （Para. 2）

4. 狀語從句

As soon as I got close enough， I glared at Carl to make him stop laughing—even though I knew he probably wouldnt. （Para. 3）

He didnt， so I walked over and stood closer to Cindy so she wouldnt feel quite so bad. （Para. 3）

Her eyes peeked up from staring at the ground and as though she thought Id be embarrassed if anyone heard her speaking to me， she whispered “Hi”. （Para. 4）

5. 非謂語作狀語

Holding her notebook tightly to her chest like a shield， she stared at the ground. （Para. 3）

（三）即學(xué)即用

1. 我拜訪了寫了許多有關(guān)中國的書的作家。（使用定語從句）

2. 她得知這個孩子已經(jīng)兩天沒有吃飯了。（使用賓語從句）

3. 她告訴他，她堅信他可以在舞臺上表演，因為她看過他在新年為家人表演短劇。（使用狀語從句）

4. 他的父親不贊成這個計劃，擔(dān)心這會影響他的成績。（使用非謂語作狀語）

三、續(xù)寫技能

（一） 表達(dá)“驚訝”的短語

（二）表達(dá)“驚訝”的句子

方法一：增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫，注意邏輯關(guān)系以及語意的合理。

1.? 聽到這個意外的消息，她呆住了，動彈不得。（動作描寫，非謂語作狀語）

Hearing the unexpected news， she froze with shock， as if rooted to the spot.

2. 他直起身，目瞪口呆地看著我。（神態(tài)描寫，連續(xù)的動作，情緒形容詞作狀語）

He straightened up and looked at me， open?mouthed.

方法二：使用修辭手法。

3. 當(dāng)喬希聽到富蘭克林想要的東西時，他的嘴張得足以吞下一個牙醫(yī)。（夸張）

When Josh heard what Franklin wanted， his mouth opened wide enough to swallow a dentist.

4. 兩個月后，我們偶然聽到老湯姆去世的消息，這猶如晴天霹靂。（夸張）

Two months later， we overheard that old Tom had died， which came as a bolt from the blue.

四、續(xù)寫布局

文章最后一段寫到，“我”對Cindy的安慰并沒能讓她產(chǎn)生一絲笑意，看到周圍的人都在和朋友聊天，她神情嚴(yán)肅地問“我”為什么她沒有朋友。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的段首句“她的問題讓我很驚訝?！保Y(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“她似乎能很好地接受，我稍微松了口氣?！?，可以推測續(xù)寫第一段主要講述“我”雖然感到驚訝和為難，但最終“我”告訴了Cindy她沒有朋友的原因并且她接受了這個原因。結(jié)合原文內(nèi)容，“我”認(rèn)為Cindy是一個害羞、善良、有體味問題的女孩，而告訴一個善良、害羞的女孩她有體味并不容易，這也是“我”在聽到Cindy的問題時感到驚訝的原因。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈展開：

1. What did I do？

2. How did Cindy react？

3. Did she accept the reason？

續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“她似乎能很好地接受，我稍微松了口氣。”遵循了正能量結(jié)局的原則。Cindy最后交到了朋友，“我”也為自己能為Cindy的生活帶來好的轉(zhuǎn)變而開心。因此可以推測，續(xù)寫第二段主要圍繞Cindy聽從“我”的建議并做出了改變，最終交到朋友而展開。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈展開：

1. What did I suggest？

2. How did Cindy feel？

3. What did Cindy do？

4. How did I feel for making a better change for Cindy？