廣東 程志麗
小女孩Cindy在校沒(méi)有朋友,一次偶然的機(jī)會(huì),“我”保護(hù)了她,她向“我”詢(xún)問(wèn)她交不到朋友的原因,“我”該如實(shí)相告嗎?Cindy的生活會(huì)有變化嗎?
1Last year there was a girl at our school who hardly talked to anyone. I think it was because she seldom showered, and she smelled kind of bad. Her name was Cindy Lindburg. I didn't know exactly where she lived,but it must have been somewhere in the neighborhood because we always got on the school bus at the same bus stop.
2Cindy Lindburg didn't have many friends.She always came to the lunch room alone and left alone. On the bus, no one offered her a seat, and she never asked if she could share a seat with others. I thought that maybe it was because she was sort of a shy person. She seemed like a nice girl, who had an odor (氣味)problem.
3One day,I was walking up to the bus stop and I saw Carl Littleton making fun of her.I couldn't hear what he was saying, but I saw him laughing and rolling his eyes in his typical poking-fun-at-you way.I also saw how sad it made Cindy.Holding her notebook tightly to her chest like a shield,she stared at the ground and moved as far away from him as possible without leaving the bus stop entirely.As soon as I got close enough,I glared at Carl to make him stop laughing—even though I knew he probably wouldn't.He didn't,so I walked over and stood closer to Cindy so she wouldn't feel quite so bad. It was just one of those times when you just knew someone needed someone to be a friend.
4I didn't think she'd say anything, but she did. Her eyes peeked (偷看) up from staring at the ground and as though she thought I'd be embarrassed if anyone heard her speaking to me,she whispered“Hi”.
5“Hi,”I said. Then as loudly as I could, I said,“Don't pay any attention to Carl. His parents have been unsuccessful in teaching him some manners.”
6Some of the kids standing there laughed. The comment didn't even rouse(喚醒)a smile out of Cindy.By now everyone there was talking with a friend.Quietly,and with a serious look on her face,Cindy said,“Why don't I have any friends?”
閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。
Paragraph 1:
Her question took me by surprise.____________________________________________
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Paragraph 2:
I was a little bit relieved since she seemed to take this well.________________________
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寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引
一、語(yǔ)篇研讀
(一)基本要素
Where When●1._________●One day 2._________●Cindy Lindburg,a shy and nice girl with an 3. _________problem and no one talked to her Who ●I,at 4. _________school with Cindy,who knew Cindy had no friends at school What●Carl Littleton,a boy making fun of Cindy●I saw Carl making fun of Cindy and Cindy felt 5. _________. So I stood closer to Cindy to make her feel not so 6. _________.Then she asked 7. _________she had no friends.Why●I helped Cindy probably because it was a good virtue to help people in need, especially people we knew.As for Cindy asking why she had no friends,it was probably because she felt 8. _________and was eager to make friends, especially when she was__________9. _________.
(二)主題探索
What is the text about?And what does the author want to tell us?
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二、語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)
(一)詞塊
__________________________________________________________________Expressions 1.kind of___________________________________________________________________________2.share sth with sb___________________________________________________________________3.make fun of_________________________________________________________________________4.roll one's eyes_____________________________________________________________________5.poke fun at 6.hold sth tightly to the chest like a shield_________________________________________________7.glare at/stare at____________________________________________________________________8.peek up__________________________________________________________________________9.pay attention to____________________________________________________________________10.be unsuccessful in doing sth_________________________________________________________Chinese meanings__________
(二)句式
1.定語(yǔ)從句
Last year there was a girl at our school who hardly talked to anyone.(Para.1)
She seemed like a nice girl,who had an odor problem.(Para.2)
It was just one of those times when you just knew someone needed someone to be a friend.(Para.3)
2.賓語(yǔ)從句
I think (that) it was because she seldom showered, and she smelled kind of bad.(Para.1)
I didn't know exactly where she lived.(Para.1)
She never asked if she could share a seat with others.(Para.2)
I couldn't hear what he was saying.(Para.3)
3.表語(yǔ)從句
I think(that)it was because she seldom showered,and she smelled kind of bad.(Para.1)I thought that maybe it was because she was sort of a shy person.(Para.2)
4.狀語(yǔ)從句
As soon as I got close enough, I glared at Carl to make him stop laughing—even though I knew he probably wouldn't.(Para.3)
He didn't,so I walked over and stood closer to Cindy so she wouldn't feel quite so bad.(Para.3)
Her eyes peeked up from staring at the ground and as though she thought I'd be embarrassed if anyone heard her speaking to me,she whispered“Hi”.(Para.4)
5.非謂語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)
Holding her notebook tightly to her chest like a shield,she stared at the ground.(Para.3)
(三)即學(xué)即用
1.我拜訪(fǎng)了寫(xiě)了許多有關(guān)中國(guó)的書(shū)的作家。(使用定語(yǔ)從句)
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2.她得知這個(gè)孩子已經(jīng)兩天沒(méi)有吃飯了。(使用賓語(yǔ)從句)
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3.她告訴他,她堅(jiān)信他可以在舞臺(tái)上表演,因?yàn)樗催^(guò)他在新年為家人表演短劇。(使用狀語(yǔ)從句)
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4.他的父親不贊成這個(gè)計(jì)劃,擔(dān)心這會(huì)影響他的成績(jī)。(使用非謂語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ))
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三、續(xù)寫(xiě)技能
(一)表達(dá)“驚訝”的短語(yǔ)
感到驚訝的驚訝地表示驚訝的神態(tài)、肢體動(dòng)作be/feel astonished/amazed/surprised/shocked/stunned/startled/open-mouthed/wide-________________eyed/thunderstruck 感到驚訝的1.in/with astonishment/surprise/shock/amazement 驚訝地2.be thrown into astonishment 大吃一驚3.to one's amazement/surprise/astonishment 令某人吃驚的是4.come as a bolt from the blue/be a bolt out of the blue 晴天霹靂________________5.be shocked beyon_________________________________________________d_words_驚訝得說(shuō)不出話(huà)來(lái)1.gasp in astonishment 驚訝得倒吸一口氣2.blink in surprise 驚訝地眨眼3.sb's eyes widen/grow wide 某人驚訝地瞪大眼睛4.sb's jaw drops/falls 某人目瞪口呆5.give a cry of surprise 吃驚地喊出來(lái)6.gape at 張口結(jié)舌地看7.freeze/stand still/be numb with shock 驚呆了________________8.raise t__________________________________________________________he_eyebrows_揚(yáng)起眉毛
(二)表達(dá)“驚訝”的句子
方法一:增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě),注意邏輯關(guān)系以及語(yǔ)意的合理。
1. 聽(tīng)到這個(gè)意外的消息,她呆住了,動(dòng)彈不得。(動(dòng)作描寫(xiě),非謂語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ))
Hearing the unexpected news,she froze with shock,as if rooted to the spot.
2.他直起身,目瞪口呆地看著我。(神態(tài)描寫(xiě),連續(xù)的動(dòng)作,情緒形容詞作狀語(yǔ))
He straightened up and looked at me,open-mouthed.
方法二:使用修辭手法。
3.當(dāng)喬希聽(tīng)到富蘭克林想要的東西時(shí),他的嘴張得足以吞下一個(gè)牙醫(yī)。(夸張)
When Josh heard what Franklin wanted, his mouth opened wide enough to swallow a dentist.
4.兩個(gè)月后,我們偶然聽(tīng)到老湯姆去世的消息,這猶如晴天霹靂。(夸張)
Two months later,we overheard that old Tom had died,which came as a bolt from the blue.
四、續(xù)寫(xiě)布局
文章最后一段寫(xiě)到,“我”對(duì)Cindy 的安慰并沒(méi)能讓她產(chǎn)生一絲笑意,看到周?chē)娜硕荚诤团笥蚜奶?,她神情?yán)肅地問(wèn)“我”為什么她沒(méi)有朋友。
根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的段首句“她的問(wèn)題讓我很驚訝。”,結(jié)合續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的段首句“她似乎能很好地接受,我稍微松了口氣。”,可以推測(cè)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段主要講述“我”雖然感到驚訝和為難,但最終“我”告訴了Cindy 她沒(méi)有朋友的原因并且她接受了這個(gè)原因。結(jié)合原文內(nèi)容,“我”認(rèn)為Cindy 是一個(gè)害羞、善良、有體味問(wèn)題的女孩,而告訴一個(gè)善良、害羞的女孩她有體味并不容易,這也是“我”在聽(tīng)到Cindy 的問(wèn)題時(shí)感到驚訝的原因。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展,可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈展開(kāi):
1.What did I do?
2.How did Cindy react?
3.Did she accept the reason?
續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的段首句“她似乎能很好地接受,我稍微松了口氣?!弊裱苏芰拷Y(jié)局的原則。Cindy 最后交到了朋友,“我”也為自己能為Cindy 的生活帶來(lái)好的轉(zhuǎn)變而開(kāi)心。因此可以推測(cè),續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段主要圍繞Cindy 聽(tīng)從“我”的建議并做出了改變,最終交到朋友而展開(kāi)。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展,可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈展開(kāi):
1.What did I suggest?
2.How did Cindy feel?
3.What did Cindy do?
4.How did I feel for making a better change for Cindy?