廣東 李奕群

養(yǎng)老院的講故事活動迎來了一位特殊的客人，她中風偏癱還患有一定程度的失語癥，可是她卻抓著一個藍色的盒子久久不愿放手……

1When I worked in a nursing home, I learned the true meaning of the national fund Blue Box. The Blue Box is not just a container into which coins are put. It is the repository of dreams, prayers and efforts of generations. I learned this at a storytelling activity in the nursing home. One day, to stimulate memories among the participants in my group,I brought a tray of objects. I set out a pair of small candlesticks, a couple of seashells, a lace-edged handkerchief, a blue box, and other odds and ends on the tray and passed it around. The residents would finger the objects, and then pass the tray on. When their turn came, they'd share a personal story that one of the objects had brought to mind.

2That day, an assistant had brought Clara to the group. Clara had suffered a stroke that left her paralyzed on one side and somewhat aphasic: She understood language but had trouble finding the correct words when she wanted to speak. Storytelling was the most inappropriate activity of all, for it focused attention on her language disability.

3When the tray went around the room, Clara grabbed the blue box in her good hand and held it to her chest tightly, refusing to relinquish it. Since no one else took an object off the tray, there were complaints from the other participants. “Anyone can tell a story about any object—these or any others,” I said. The complaints died down. Then the stories began. One woman told how the seashells reminded her of going to the beach every summer Sunday as a child. Another described the lacy handkerchief she carried when she fell in love with a soldier. The next person was Clara, but the person beyond her,knowing Clara never participated in a group, cleared her throat. Clara waved the blue box and said, “Mine, mine.” Another old woman, a former social worker, said, “Clara wants to speak! ” Clara nodded, and the room became silent.

Reading Check

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1:

Slowly, Clara began her story that happened during the Great Depression.

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Paragraph 2:

“The collected money helped offer shelters to many homeless people,” Clara said proudly and the room was silent.

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Step 1 語篇研讀

語篇概要

本文是一篇記敘文，其主題語境為“人與社會”。 克拉拉是一位特殊的客人，她中風偏癱還患有一定程度的失語癥，她參加了養(yǎng)老院的講故事活動，她抓著一個藍色的盒子，想要說出她的故事。 全文結(jié)構(gòu)如下：

文本梳理

人物分析

Characters Clues Personalities/Feelings Clara●Clara had suffered a stroke that left her paralyzed on one side and somewhat 1. .●Clara waved the blue box and said, “Mine, mine.”●“The collected money helped offer shelters to many homeless people,” Clara said 2. and the room was silent.brave, determined and 3.I●One day, to stimulate memories among the participants in my group, I brought a tray of objects.●“Anyone can tell a story about any object—these or any others,” I said.responsible and 4.other participants●There were 5. from the other participants.●The complaints died down.●The next person was Clara,but the person beyond her,knowing Clara never participated in a group, cleared her throat.unsatisfied and 6.

Step 2 情節(jié)構(gòu)思

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的段首句和續(xù)寫第二段的段首句可知， 克拉拉講的是她籌錢幫助經(jīng)濟大蕭條時期無家可歸的人的故事。我們可以預(yù)測，當克拉拉得知經(jīng)濟大蕭條時期無家可歸者的窘境時，她十分擔心，于是她想方設(shè)法地為他們籌錢，幫助他們渡過難關(guān)。 推薦表達：ache for、collect money for、bring those days back。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的段首句，我們可以從以下幾個問題進行推測：

1. How did Clara tell the story?

2. What happened during the Great Depression?

3. What's the function of the blue box?

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段的段首句，我們可以倒推續(xù)寫第一段的結(jié)尾：

1. Clara was deeply worried about the homeless people.

2. Clara collected money for the homeless people.

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段的段首句，我們可以從以下幾個問題進行推測：

1. How did other participants feel when they heard the story?

2. What did Clara do after telling the story?

3. What did people think of Clara after listening to the story?

Step 3 語言打磨

原文語言分析

一、語言特色

比喻句的使用使文章更加生動、形象且有文采。

1. It is the repository of dreams, prayers and efforts of generations. (Para. 1)連貫的動作動詞的使用使文章的細節(jié)描寫更加具體。2. When the tray went around the room, Clara grabbed the blue box in her good hand and held it to her chest tightly, refusing to relinquish it. (Para. 3)

二、精彩詞塊

repository of dreams 夢想的儲藏室

prayers and efforts of generations 幾代人的祈望和努力

bring sth to mind 想起；記起

have trouble doing sth 做某事有困難

focus attention on 集中注意力于……

grab sth in one's hand 把某物抓在手上

die down 逐漸平息

remind sb of sth 使某人想起某物

participate in 參加

續(xù)寫語言提升

一、情緒描寫

There were complaints from the other participants. 其他參與者開始抱怨。

The complaints died down. 抱怨逐漸消失。

二、行為描寫

finger the objects 觸摸物體

pass the tray on 傳遞托盤

hold sth to one's chest 將某物抱在某人的胸前

refuse to relinquish sth 不愿讓出某物

take an object off the tray 從托盤里拿走一樣東西

clear one's throat 清了清嗓子

wave the blue box 揮舞藍色盒子