陳麗芳

母親節(jié)這天，特尼森和爸爸來(lái)到商店購(gòu)物，發(fā)現(xiàn)了一位摔倒受傷的老婦人，特尼森堅(jiān)持要給老婦人買花。收到花的老婦人會(huì)怎樣呢？

It was Mothers Day morning last year. With the purpose of buying a gift for my wife， I was doing my shopping at our local supermarket with my five?year?old son， Tenyson. After picking up a box of chocolates， Tenyson and I were going home with satisfaction. As we were leaving， we found that only minutes earlier an elderly woman had fallen over at the entrance and had hit her head on the concrete. Her husband was with her， but there was blood everywhere and the woman was embarrassed and clearly in shock.

Walking towards the scene， Tenyson became very upset about what had happened to the couple. He said to me， “Dad， its not much fun falling over in front of everyone.”

At the front of the supermarket， a charity （慈善） group had set up a stand selling cooked sausages and flowers to raise funds. Tenyson suggested that we should buy the lady a flower.

“It will make her feel better，” he said. I was amazed that hed come up with such a sweet idea. So we went over to the flower seller and asked her if we could buy a flower for the lady to cheer her up. “Just take it，” she replied. “I cant take your money for such a wonderful gesture.”

By now paramedics （護(hù)理人員） had arrived， and were attending to the injured woman. As we walked up to her， my son became intimidated by all the blood and medical equipment. He said he was just too scared to go up to her.

After a few minutes of hesitation， I decided to set a good example to my son. Thus， I gave the flower to the womans husband personally and told him， “My son was very upset about your wife and wanted to give her this flower to make her feel better.”

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閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

Upon hearing that， the old man felt seized by a burst of warm current， and couldnt help crying.

Paragraph 2：

The man then bent down and gave his wife the flower， telling her who it was from.

寫作導(dǎo)引

Ⅰ. Sorting the elements

[Genre 1.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? Characters Tenyson， Tenysons dad， a couple， the flower seller When & Where On 2.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? morning last year

At a local 3.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? Plots Background It was Mothers Day. Tenyson and his father were 4.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? at their local supermarket. Beginning An elderly woman had 5.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? at the entrance and had hit her head on the concrete. Development Tenyson suggested buying the lady a flower to 6.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?. Climax 7.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? had arrived and were attending to the injured woman.? Tenysons father stepped forward to give the flower to the womans husband. ]

Ⅱ. Analyzing the characters personalities

[Characters Clues Personalities/Feelings Tenyson Walking towards the scene， Tenyson became very 1.? ? ? ? ? ? ? about what had happened to the couple.

He said he was just too 2.? ? ? ? ? ? ? to go up to her. 3.? ? ? ? ? ? ? but a little 4.? ? ? ? ? ? ? Tenysons dad I was amazed that hed come up with such a sweet idea. nice， kind The injured woman The woman was 5.? ? ? ? ? ? ? and clearly 6.? ? ? ? ? ? ?. feeling upset The womans husband Her husband was with her. devoted， kind ]

Ⅲ. Exploring the theme

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us by telling this story？

Ⅳ. Discovering language features

1. Analyzing language features

（1）with結(jié)構(gòu)，使用較為靈活。

With the purpose of buying a gift for my wife， I was doing my shopping at our local supermarket with my five?year?old son， Tenyson. （Para. 1）

（2）現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)，與邏輯主語(yǔ)為主動(dòng)關(guān)系，使用較為地道。

Walking towards the scene， Tenyson became very upset about what had happened to the couple. （Para. 2）

（3）too + adj. + to do 意為“太……而不能……”，讓表達(dá)更生動(dòng)形象。

He said he was just too scared to go up to her. （Para. 5）

2. Discovering useful chunks

be amazed that 對(duì)……感到驚訝

come up with 提出

go over to 朝……走去

cheer sb up 使某人開(kāi)心

be too scared to do 太害怕而不能

after a few minutes of hesitation 稍有遲疑

V. Conceiving new plots

續(xù)寫步驟：

1. 根據(jù)故事最后一段，“我”上前把花送給受傷老奶奶的丈夫的情節(jié)可以推測(cè)下文會(huì)描寫老爺爺收到花之后的心情和反應(yīng)，推薦表達(dá)有moved to tears、feeling grateful、filled with gratitude。

2. 從續(xù)寫第一段的段首句，我們可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈推測(cè)：

（1）How did the old man feel？

（2）What would he do next？

（3）What would he say to the author？

3. 從續(xù)寫第二段的段首句，我們可根據(jù)以下問(wèn)題鏈推測(cè)：

（1）How did the injured woman feel？

（2）What would she do next？

（3）What would she say to Tenyson？