江蘇徐州市沛縣中學(xué) 吳愛華

作者在妻子的建議下邀請了他母親吃飯，并從中感悟到：愛要及時說出口。

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難詞探意

1. widow /?w?d??/ n. 寡婦

2. suspect /s??spekt/ v. 懷疑

3. haste /he?st/ n. 匆忙

4. extraordinary /?k?str??dnri/ adj. 特別的；非凡的

After 21 years of marriage, my wife wanted me to take another woman out to dinner. She said calmly, “I love you but I know this woman loves you too and would love to spend some time with you.” The woman that my wife wanted me to visit was my mother, who had been a widow for 19 years, but I visited her only occasionally.That night I called to invite her to go out for dinner and a movie.

“What's wrong, are you well?” she asked nervously. My mother is the type of woman who suspects that a late night call or a surprise invitation is a sign of bad news. “It would be pleasant to be with you. Just the two of us.” I responded with haste. She thought about it for a moment, and then said excitedly, “I would like that very much.”

That Friday night after work, as I drove over to pick her up I felt a bit nervous. When I arrived at her house, I noticed that she, too,seemed to be nervous about our date. She waited in the door with her coat on. She had curled her hair and was wearing the dress that she had worn to celebrate her last wedding anniversary.My mother took my arm gently as if she had been the First Lady and we entered a nice restaurant.

After we sat down, I had to read the menu.Half way through the entry, I lifted my eyes and saw Mom sitting there staring at me. What I did reached something deep inside her. A sweet smile was on her lips. “It was I who used to

Language Study

Useful expressions for creating a novel

1. expressions for describing emotions

say calmly 平靜地說

ask nervously 緊張地問

say excitedly 興奮地說

feel a bit nervous 感到有些緊張

Bathed in the warm atmosphere, we talked so much that we missed the movie. 沐浴在溫暖的氣氛中，我們相聊甚歡以至于錯過了電影。

What I did reached something deep inside her.我所做的事情觸動了她內(nèi)心深處的某個地方。

2. expressions for describing behaviour

respond with haste 趕緊回答

take one's arm gently 輕輕地挽住某人的胳膊

lift one's eyes 抬起眼睛

stare at 凝視

say sweetly 甜甜地說

respond generously 慷慨地回應(yīng)

3. expressions for describing expressions

A sweet smile was on her lips. 她的唇上掛著甜蜜的微笑。

with a mysterious expression 表情神秘have to read the menu when you were small,”she said sweetly. “Then it's time that you relaxed and let me return the favor,” I responded generously.

During the dinner, we had a pleasant conversation—nothing extraordinary, but catching up on recent events of each other's life. Bathed in the warm atmosphere, we talked so much that we missed the movie. As we arrived at her house later, she said with a mysterious expression, “I'll go out with you again, but only if you let me invite you.” I agreed.

Reading Check

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1:

“How was your dinner date?” asked my wife when I got home.______________________

Paragraph 2:

At that moment,I understood the importance of saying “I LOVE YOU! ” in time.__________

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇分析

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密，就必須充分了解所給材料的大意。 仔細(xì)閱讀所給材料， 充分理解閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，掌握作者想要通過材料所傳達(dá)的意思。

本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思

我們可以基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，圍繞中心進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)。 這一構(gòu)思分為四步:

第一步，根據(jù)原文判斷文章的立意。

根據(jù)本文第一段的內(nèi)容——作者妻子要作者抽空陪伴他母親，可推斷出本文的立意很可能是要告訴我們，做子女的，工作再忙也要抽出時間陪伴父母， 否則等到“子欲養(yǎng)而親不待”時，就悔之晚矣了。

第二步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思。

1. How would the author answer his wife's question?

2. What would happen after he answered his wife's question?

第三步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段一定要寫什么。

分析一下第二段所給出的段首句“At that moment, I understood the importance of saying‘I LOVE YOU! ’ in time.”可知，續(xù)寫第一段肯定要寫作者母親突然離他而去，如此構(gòu)思才能確保續(xù)寫的兩段是相互銜接的。

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思。

1. What time does “that moment” refer to?

2. Why did the author understand the importance of saying “I LOVE YOU! ” in time?

3. To whom did the author feel the need to say “I LOVE YOU！ ” in time?

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意銜接的問題，做到情節(jié)連貫，語言風(fēng)格一致。 從銜接的部位來分有三種：1. 兩段的續(xù)寫與原文之間的銜接；2. 每段的續(xù)寫與續(xù)寫段落首句之間的銜接；3. 續(xù)寫的兩段之間的銜接。同時要注意語法、句型，以及所用詞的準(zhǔn)確性。 例如，刻畫人物形象時要選用恰當(dāng)?shù)膭釉~使其栩栩如生；描寫人物心理活動時要善于使用一些形容詞或副詞使其細(xì)微、深入。