我們知道，雅思作文的寫法可以千變?nèi)f化，但最根本的兩個(gè)結(jié)構(gòu)是“一邊倒”和“雙邊討論”。在寫作前的審題過(guò)程中，我們首先需要確定的就是到底采取哪一種結(jié)構(gòu)，只有這個(gè)確定了，接下來(lái)才有可能寫得順暢自如。本期老雅先談“一邊倒”這種作文結(jié)構(gòu)模式的基本樣態(tài)、常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤及其解決辦法。

所謂“一邊倒”，就是完全同意/反對(duì)題目中的觀點(diǎn)，或者完全同意/反對(duì)題目中的A觀點(diǎn)或B觀點(diǎn)。比如，題目問(wèn)：應(yīng)該在餐館吃飯還是在家吃飯？如果你的觀點(diǎn)是100%應(yīng)該在家吃飯，那你使用的結(jié)構(gòu)就是“一邊倒”。再如：人口過(guò)多引起了世界上絕大多數(shù)問(wèn)題，你是否同意？如果你的觀點(diǎn)是：沒(méi)錯(cuò)，世界上絕大多數(shù)問(wèn)題都是人口過(guò)多引起的。ok，那就是“一邊倒”。

現(xiàn)在的問(wèn)題是：什么時(shí)候適合用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)？用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)該注意哪些問(wèn)題？

老雅認(rèn)為，不是所有題目都適合用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)。有些老師建議烤鴨只用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)，理由是這樣寫“觀點(diǎn)更明確”。老雅完全理解這些老師的初衷。因?yàn)?，很多學(xué)生缺乏思辨性的思維能力，如果強(qiáng)行讓他們進(jìn)行雙邊討論，結(jié)果往往是丟失了自己的觀點(diǎn)，從而造成“觀點(diǎn)不明確”這樣的重大錯(cuò)誤，而一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)就能避免這樣的錯(cuò)誤出現(xiàn)，因?yàn)橐贿叺沟拇_能夠確保立場(chǎng)堅(jiān)定、觀點(diǎn)明確。然而，這里的問(wèn)題是，立場(chǎng)堅(jiān)定、觀點(diǎn)明確不一定是好作文。杠精的立場(chǎng)也很堅(jiān)定，觀點(diǎn)也很明確，但我們不喜歡和杠精說(shuō)話，也不喜歡讀他們寫的文章。為什么呢？因?yàn)楦芫奈恼露嗍恰白哉f(shuō)自話”，完全不去認(rèn)真考慮別人的立場(chǎng)。我們喜歡讀到的文章是“觀點(diǎn)明確，言之成理”，這才是好作文的標(biāo)志。

因此，有些題目是適合一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)的，有些題目是不適合的。老雅的基本判斷是：當(dāng)你決定用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)，然后發(fā)現(xiàn)對(duì)方觀點(diǎn)其實(shí)也有明顯可取之處時(shí)，就最好不要用一邊倒。即使你非要用一邊倒，那也得用某種方式承認(rèn)對(duì)方觀點(diǎn)的合理性，要不然，考官就可能認(rèn)為你是杠精：明明對(duì)方觀點(diǎn)有明顯的合理之處，你卻視而不見(jiàn)，非要一邊倒，這樣的作文觀點(diǎn)再突出，也不符合情理，因此難以得到高分。比如：有人認(rèn)為看電視是孩子學(xué)習(xí)的有效方式，因此應(yīng)該鼓勵(lì)孩子看電視，你是否同意？一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)就是：不同意孩子看電視，理由很多（傷害身體、養(yǎng)成不良學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)慣等），或者同意孩子看電視，理由也很多（生動(dòng)形象、獲取各種知識(shí)等）。兩種一邊倒都可做到“觀點(diǎn)明確”，但我們自己寫的時(shí)候心里都是發(fā)毛的：難道真的要無(wú)節(jié)操地同意孩子看電視嗎？難道看電視真的一無(wú)是處嗎？在這種情況下，用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)導(dǎo)致的基本是失敗，因?yàn)槟阒粚懥艘幻?，沒(méi)有寫出另一面，你的結(jié)論是沒(méi)有說(shuō)服力的，這一點(diǎn)你很清楚，考官比你更清楚。那如果用雙邊討論呢？我們首先承認(rèn)看電視可以幫助孩子學(xué)習(xí)，然后寫看電視有很多壞處和局限，最后給出結(jié)論：可以讓孩子通過(guò)看電視學(xué)習(xí)，但學(xué)校和家長(zhǎng)應(yīng)該給孩子看電視設(shè)定限制，而不是鼓勵(lì)他們看電視。這樣，通過(guò)合理的分析，得出了自己鮮明的結(jié)論。這個(gè)結(jié)論與一邊倒的結(jié)論相比，同樣鮮明，但合理得多。

在可以使用一邊倒的作文中，我們要注意以下兩點(diǎn)：

第一，在論證自己支持的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，不要忘記去證偽你不支持的觀點(diǎn)。比如：有人認(rèn)為應(yīng)該和外星人聯(lián)系，但有人認(rèn)為這樣做很危險(xiǎn)，請(qǐng)給出你自己的觀點(diǎn)。就這個(gè)題目，很多同學(xué)用一邊倒，即必須和外星人聯(lián)系，理由很多（學(xué)習(xí)其先進(jìn)技術(shù)、為未來(lái)的人類找到安身之所等），然后就結(jié)論說(shuō)必須聯(lián)系外星人。這個(gè)一邊倒觀點(diǎn)很明確，然而卻忘記了對(duì)題目中的“危險(xiǎn)論”作出反應(yīng)。在一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)下，我們應(yīng)該批駁“危險(xiǎn)論”，認(rèn)為和外星人聯(lián)系根本不會(huì)有危險(xiǎn)，即使有危險(xiǎn)，為了未來(lái)，我們也值得去冒這個(gè)險(xiǎn)。這樣，批駁反方觀點(diǎn)，來(lái)強(qiáng)化自己支持的觀點(diǎn)。這個(gè)一邊倒是建立在對(duì)反方觀點(diǎn)的有效批駁上，因此就顯得比較合理。

第二，在一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)中，如果發(fā)現(xiàn)對(duì)方的觀點(diǎn)也有不少合理之處，一定要加以承認(rèn)（但不需要詳細(xì)論述），然后再轉(zhuǎn)折回來(lái)論證并強(qiáng)調(diào)自己的“一邊倒”觀點(diǎn)更加合理。這樣的寫作才會(huì)讓考官覺(jué)得，你的論點(diǎn)是建立在考慮過(guò)對(duì)方立場(chǎng)的基礎(chǔ)上的，因而是更有說(shuō)服力的。

總結(jié)一下：（1）一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)在雅思作文中其實(shí)很少見(jiàn)，多數(shù)作文題目中的觀點(diǎn)不是那么明顯正確或錯(cuò)誤的，而是都有一定的合理性;（2）即使使用一邊倒，也要認(rèn)真對(duì)待對(duì)方觀點(diǎn)，要么批駁它，要么承認(rèn)它，這樣才是對(duì)題目觀點(diǎn)的充分反映，也才是更合理的論說(shuō)方式。

以下，我們來(lái)看兩篇雅思范文，它們均采用了一邊倒的結(jié)構(gòu)。

范文一

【題目】In many countries women are able to join the armed forces on the equal basis as men. However， some people think only men should be members of the army， navy and air force. To what extent do you agree or disagree？ （2016/05/19）

【思路分析】 對(duì)于女性能否參軍這一問(wèn)題，我們的態(tài)度無(wú)非有如下三種：（1）女性不能參軍，只有男性可以參軍;（2）女性完全可以參軍;（3）部分同意，部分不同意，女性可以參軍，但在軍隊(duì)里從事的工作應(yīng)該與男性不同。如果我們選擇論述觀點(diǎn)（1）或（2），我們就是在“一邊倒”。本范文論述了觀點(diǎn)（1），即女性不適合參軍。值得注意的是，在單方面論證女性不適合參軍后，本文在最后一段對(duì)女性對(duì)國(guó)家安全的貢獻(xiàn)也給予了肯定，這樣，本文的“女性不適合參軍”的觀點(diǎn)就顯得更加合情合理，而不是一根筋了。

Just 100 years ago， women serving in the armed forces was basically unheard of， yet now in many countries， women are able to join the armed forces as easily as men. Not afraid of the accusation of being prejudiced or even male chauvinistic， I strongly believe that men and only men should be members of the army， navy and air forces.

In the first place， being a soldier is extremely demanding physically. With very few exceptions， women are not possibly able to withstand the long hours of military exercises and drills. For example， soldiers are sometimes required to remain exposed to the strong sunlight or the heavy storms hours after hours， or to walk many miles with heavy things carried with them. This means a soldier must possess great strength， stamina and endurance. While I am not willing to say that all women are lacking in these qualities， I am pretty sure that most women are not physically fit to become a soldier. In addition， joining the army， navy or air forces means you have to injure or even kill people. This is emotionally unacceptable to most women because they are the ones who do not like that much blood shedding.

Furthermore， if a woman plans to join the armed forces， she will have to tackle a number of other social issues. For instance， her parents may have strong objections to this choice of hers， because with a daughter in the army， they may be met with inquiring and doubtful eye from their neighbors and friends. It was for this reason that my cousin sister had to give up her dream of becoming a soldier. Even if a woman does become an army member， she will have to learn to face a world full of the opposite sex. She may feel completely at odds with the rules and disciplines which are designed predominantly for men.

To conclude， physically， emotionally and socially speaking， women are not supposed to serve in the armed forces. However， this does not mean that women do not have their share of responsibility to protect their country. As an advocate of “l(fā)abor distribution” theory， I think women can help the men soldiers by taking care of their parents， children， and the family， and this is as important as serving in the army themselves.

范文二

【題目】Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants and canteens. Do you agree or disagree？

【思路分析】本題有兩個(gè)對(duì)立的觀點(diǎn)：在家吃飯vs去餐館吃飯。我們的觀點(diǎn)可能有以下三種：（1）在家吃飯;（2）在餐館吃飯;（3）各有好處。如果選擇論述觀點(diǎn)（1）或（2），就是采用一邊倒結(jié)構(gòu)。本范文論述的觀點(diǎn)是“應(yīng)該在家吃飯”，并提出了三個(gè)理由。值得大家學(xué)習(xí)的是，在一邊倒地論述“應(yīng)該在家吃飯”這一觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，范文沒(méi)有忘記駁斥“在餐館吃飯”，這讓“應(yīng)該在家吃飯”這一觀點(diǎn)顯得更加具有說(shuō)服力。

Everyone has to eat. The question is， where to eat？ You may cook and eat at home， or just eat out in restaurants or canteens. My personal opinion is that eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out.

First， it has no doubt that cooking and eating at home can save a lot of money. Generally， the cost of eating in restaurants is much higher than eating at home. By cooking at home， you don’t have to pay the labor fee for the chef， and don’t have to pay tips to the waiter. What you have to do is just a little hand operation and a little time. From supermarkets， you can buy cheap vegetables and meat， which may cost only 10 percent of the same food in a restaurant. Sometimes， you can get cheaper food in discount time. Especially， a big family may enjoy the method， as the monthly cost would be less.

Second， you can freely select your favorite food to cook. A restaurant cannot always provide you with delicious food. The taste of food in restaurants is usually designed for the public， which is not suitable for a particular guest. If you miss the taste of your mum’s soup， it’s not likely to find the same one in a restaurant. In this case， the best choice is to cook by yourself， to reproduce your mum’s food to the best you can.

Finally， it’s obvious that eating at home is more healthy and clean. You don’t know whether it’s dirty in the restaurants， and also you don’t know whether the food is fresh. But by cooking at home， you can know everything about the cooking materials. Moreover， it’s easy to control the usage of fat and oil， unless you don’t care to become too fat.

In brief， I believe that eating at home is healthy and clean. If people want to save money， eating at home is also a good choice. In addition， people can cook what they like as well. So I personally prefer eating at home.

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