江西 邱世才

★話題概述

有關(guān)活動(dòng)與經(jīng)歷的話題作文一般記錄某項(xiàng)具體活動(dòng)或者生活中的某一方面的經(jīng)歷,同時(shí)也記錄下了作者在這些活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷中所遇到的趣事、參與其中所得到的體會(huì)與感受等。

此類話題作文多為記敘文。由于活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷大都發(fā)生在過(guò)去,所以在敘述所見所聞的時(shí)候,文章往往以一般過(guò)去時(shí)的表達(dá)為主。

★佳作賞評(píng)

An unforgettable day

March 5th was a special day.Let me tell you what we did that day．

On the morning of March 5th,some volunteers from our school went to the People's Nursing Home.The elderly gave us a warm welcome when we got there.We handed flowers and fruit to them,and gave them our best wishes.Then we helped them to do some housework,such as cleaning the windows or making the bed for them.All the old people were smiling at us while we were working．

After that,some of us gave a performance for them,such as singing songs and dancing.Some of us read the newspaper for them.Some chatted with them.When it was time for us to leave,they were grateful for our kindness．

From this meaningful activity,I have learned that we should care for the old and respect them.In our daily life,we should offer our seats to them on a bus and we should chat with them as much as possible.I hope we can have some chances to work for the old people together once again．

【權(quán)威點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文記敘了在3月5日“學(xué)雷鋒紀(jì)念日”這天,學(xué)校組織志愿者去人民敬老院開展志愿活動(dòng)的經(jīng)歷,并準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)了志愿者們參加志愿活動(dòng)的感受。從寫作的基本框架來(lái)看,作者是分為四個(gè)自然段完成全文的。具體情況如下：

1.第1段直接開篇點(diǎn)題。該段中的a special day與標(biāo)題直接相呼應(yīng)。

2.第2、3段為詳細(xì)描寫。這兩段先后交代了本次活動(dòng)的時(shí)間(March 5th)、地點(diǎn)(the People's Nursing Home)、人物(some volunteers from our school)和活動(dòng)過(guò)程(hand flowers and fruit,give best wishes,do some housework,clean the windows,make the bed,give a performance)等。

3.第4段簡(jiǎn)談活動(dòng)后的感想。從活動(dòng)中，作者感受到大家在生活中應(yīng)該照顧好老人(care for the old),并尊重老人(respect the old)?！皐e should...”的兩次使用,更深化了主旨。

文中的give sb.a warm welcome,give sb.one's best wishes,help sb.to do sth.,be grateful for,chat with sb.,care for sb.等短語(yǔ)和when,while等從句的使用,顯示出作者較好的語(yǔ)言基本功。

總之,全文結(jié)構(gòu)安排合理,句式及詞語(yǔ)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng),是一篇比較成功的英語(yǔ)作文。

★思路點(diǎn)撥

finish,have a good time...

【典型句型】

1.We went to...我們?nèi)チ恕?/p>

2.We visited... 我們參觀(游覽)了……

3.We went there by...我們乘坐……去了那里

4.How happy we were!我們太高興了!

5.All of us were very tired,but happy that day.那天我們都很累了,但是很高興。

★題例解析

【寫作導(dǎo)學(xué)】

記敘活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷的作文屬于記敘文的范疇。對(duì)待此類話題的英語(yǔ)作文,在寫作時(shí)，我們應(yīng)該注意以下幾個(gè)方面的問(wèn)題：

1.明確寫作的標(biāo)題。這類話題的英語(yǔ)作文常采用“An unforgettable...”“A pleasant...”等作為標(biāo)題。

2.準(zhǔn)確應(yīng)用人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。記敘活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷的文章通常使用第一人稱。如果描述他人的活動(dòng)情況,可以使用第三人稱。無(wú)論以何種人稱呈現(xiàn),時(shí)態(tài)多以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主。

3.注重文章結(jié)構(gòu)或布局。記敘活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷的文章主要是從時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物、活動(dòng)和感想幾個(gè)方面進(jìn)行布局謀篇。做到這些,我們就能使活動(dòng)經(jīng)歷的敘述更加順暢、更有條理。文章結(jié)尾往往使用諸如“We all had a good time./We learned a lot from the farmers./What a pleasant day we had!”的句子表達(dá)對(duì)此次活動(dòng)或經(jīng)歷的感想、體會(huì),從而深化文章的主題。

【高頻詞語(yǔ)】

volunteer,together,arrive in/at,get to,go to...with sb.,help sb.(to)do sth.,each other,special day,experience,chat with,care for,enjoy doing,

昨天是端午節(jié),你們班去陽(yáng)光學(xué)?？赐羰貎和?給他們送一些書,并參與一些活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你以“A pleasant day”為題，給?？瘜懸黄⒄Z(yǔ)文章,記錄當(dāng)天的活動(dòng)情況。

要點(diǎn)提示：

1.與留守兒童一起高興地包粽子、表演節(jié)目,并與他們談心；

2.談?wù)勀銓?duì)此次活動(dòng)的感想。

具體要求：

1.短文應(yīng)包含所有的提示要點(diǎn),也可適當(dāng)增加某些細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫；

2.詞數(shù)不能少于100。

參考詞匯：Dragon Boat Festival端午節(jié),zongzi粽子,left-behind children留守兒童

A pleasant day

【寫作提示】

從所給的題目(A pleasant day)和具體要求可以看出,這是一篇記述端午節(jié)去陽(yáng)光學(xué)?？赐羰貎和奈恼隆＞唧w思路如下：

一、結(jié)構(gòu)安排

全文可以分為三個(gè)自然段。第一段直接點(diǎn)題,記錄活動(dòng)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、主題等情況。短文開頭以“Yesterday”為提示,點(diǎn)明活動(dòng)的時(shí)間,為短文的時(shí)態(tài)定好基調(diào)；第二段重點(diǎn)介紹當(dāng)天的活動(dòng),如留守兒童帶領(lǐng)大家參觀陽(yáng)光學(xué)校、一起包餃子、表演節(jié)目、留守兒童喝彩、一起聊天等；第三段用帶有強(qiáng)烈感情色彩的簡(jiǎn)短句子,抒發(fā)感受,呼應(yīng)主題。

二、建議詞匯

the Sunshine School,send our regards to sb.,by bike/by bus,go there on foot,walk there,show sb.around,make zongzi together,perform,cheer for sb.,chat with sb.,each other...

三、句型推薦

1.After we got there,the left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School./The leftbehind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.

2.Weperformedforthethem and they cheered for us./We gave a performance for them and they cheered for us.

3.All of us were very tired,but happy that day./How happy we were!

四、時(shí)態(tài)與人稱

本文是對(duì)過(guò)去活動(dòng)的描述,因此應(yīng)該以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主。根據(jù)題目中“談?wù)勀銓?duì)此次活動(dòng)的感想”等內(nèi)容判斷,人稱應(yīng)以第一人稱為主,適當(dāng)穿插其他人稱。for it for a long time.

In the morning,we met at the school gate.Then we walked there.The left-behind children showed us around the Sunshine School after we got there.We gave some interesting books to them and they felt very happy.We made zongzi together happily.In the afternoon,we performed for them and they cheered for us.After that,we chatted with each other.They were grateful for our help,too.

How happy we were!Helping others is very important in our lives.As the saying goes,“Giving is much better than receiving.”

★嘗試練筆

去商店購(gòu)物是日常生活中很常見的活動(dòng)。在購(gòu)物時(shí),你遇到過(guò)有趣或難忘的事情嗎？請(qǐng)以“A pleasant shopping experience”為題寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文,敘述你在“購(gòu)物”時(shí)的所見所聞,并談?wù)勀愕母邢搿?/p>

具體要求：

1.層次清晰,意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,書寫規(guī)范；

3.詞數(shù)80～100。

A pleasant shopping experience

【參考范文】

A pleasant day

YesterdaywasDragonBoatFestival.My class went to the Sunshine School to help the leftbehind children there and send our regards to them.We were very happy to do that and prepared

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