韓天福

In order to become a good student， you should keep good habit① and ways in learning all the subjects. First of all， you should prepare for lessons before class. Its very important for you to listen to the teacher and take notes carefully in class. After class， you should review the lessons and finish your homework on time. Its good to study in pairs or groups and help each other. If you want to make a great achievements②， you should go on exploring some new ways of learning. Therefore， summing up experience， drawing lessons and working hard is great important to you. For example， in learning English， besides more listening， speaking， reading and writing， you should practice to speak③ it in and out of class and remember new words， grammar points as many as possible. If you have problems， youd better ask teachers for help. On the other hand， remember to take more exercises④ and enough sleep every day. When you get tired， youd better relax yourself. I hope all these will be very helpful to you. Do you want to have a try？

湖北省十堰市鄖縣楊溪中學(xué)九（2）班 王娜

點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

該同學(xué)英語基本功相對(duì)扎實(shí)，整篇文章內(nèi)容詳實(shí)，語言流暢，時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確，詞句運(yùn)用恰到好處。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①habit應(yīng)改為名詞復(fù)數(shù)habits。根據(jù)上下文內(nèi)容，此處應(yīng)表達(dá)復(fù)數(shù)意義。

②achievements應(yīng)改為achievement。前文有表單數(shù)的冠詞a。

③to speak應(yīng)改為speaking。 practice后應(yīng)接動(dòng)名詞形式。

④exercises應(yīng)改為exercise。該詞意為“鍛煉、運(yùn)動(dòng)”時(shí)為不可數(shù)名詞。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考滿分15的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。endprint