互動平臺

【欄目要求】

1.將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績; 2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號;3.根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由; 4.給學生習作點評lt;優(yōu)點與不足gt;;5.請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

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本期點評名師

姜經志男，中學英語高級教師、省級骨干教師、淮北市優(yōu)秀教師、中國外語學習學研究會會員，《學英語》《英語周報》特約編輯；多年來，在省級以上報刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎；曾主編《初中生英語滿分作文大全》《英語奧林匹克》《新目標英語八年級暑假作業(yè)》，參與編輯《高中英語知識點反饋與閱讀》《初中英語題典大全》《21世紀英語學習指南》《初中英語新作文》等；曾輔導學生30余人次在國家和省級英語競賽中獲獎。

My Birthday

Today is Friday.It is my thirteen①birthday.I got up very early in the morning and put on my new clothes happily.My parents bought me the new clothes for②my birthday present.I went to school earlier than before.I invited many classmates come③to my birthday party in the evening.

Evening came at last.Many of my classmates came to my home.They bought me lots of beautiful present④.They all said,“Happy birthday to you! ”We all sang birthday songs happily.Then my parents took out a big birthday cake and said to me,“Happy birthday!We love you forever!”

At the end of the party,we eated⑤the birthday cake and some other delicious food.How happy I was!

安徽省濉溪縣百善中心學校七（1）班 趙毅

1.優(yōu)點:

這是一篇典型的記敘文；時間、地點、人物、事件等要素齊全，表達清晰，讓人一目了然；時態(tài)運用準確。

2.需要修改的地方：

①thirteen應改為thirteenth。此處應用序數詞thirteenth，意為“第十三”。

②for應改為as。表示“作為”，此處應用as。

③come應改為to come。表示“邀請某人去做某事”，應用invite sb.to do sth.。

④present應改為presents。此處應用名詞的復數形式。

⑤eated應改為ate。eat的過去式是不規(guī)則變化，即ate。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分25分的標準，本文修改前可得22分。

【欄目要求】

1.將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績; 2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號;3.根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由; 4.給學生習作點評lt;優(yōu)點與不足gt;;

5.請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

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本期點評名師

張超 男，河北省衡水市阜城縣古城中學英語一級教師，市英語優(yōu)秀教師，縣骨干教師，從事英語教育教學工作多年。曾在《中學生英語》《學英語》《英語周報》《初中生周報》《中學生英語讀寫》《中學英語園地》《英語輔導》《校園英語》《中學生語數外》等省級以上報刊發(fā)表文章數百篇，并有多篇論文獲獎；曾參與高中版教輔資料《天天向上》《三維方案》的編寫工作；曾榮獲“中央教育科學研究所全國基礎教育科研先進個人”榮譽稱號；多次輔導學生在省、市和國家級英語競賽中獲獎。

A Letter to Sam

Dear Sam,

I’m so glad to tell you something about our school,one of the most well known schools in China.

Our school was founded in 1951.It lie①in the southeast of Hebei Province.It is famous in②its good quality in teaching.Now it has about 1,800 students who are working hard for our country.The number of teachers are③more than 100.The teachers teach very well and work hard to help the students.During the past 60 years,a great number of students have graduated from our school.Many of them have made great successes in their own field.We are all proud for④them.

I hope you’ll have a chance to visit our school in the near future.

Yours,

Zhang Qi

河北省阜城縣古城中學八年級（3）班 張琪

1.優(yōu)點：

本文覆蓋了所有的提示要點，表達自然流暢，結構嚴謹。小作者在行文時有意識地使用了定語從句、賓語從句等一些較復雜的句子結構，句與句間使用了一些連詞，使文章結構連貫，層次井然，體現了小作者扎實的寫作功底。

2.需要修改的地方：

①lie應改為lies。因為句子主語是單數名詞our school，謂語動詞應用第三人稱單數形式。

②in應改為for。be famous for是固定短語，意思是“以……而著名”。

③are應改為is。the number of...意為“……的數目”，作主語時，謂語動詞要用單數形式。

④for改為of。be proud of...為固定短語，意為“因……而自豪”。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分20的評分標準，本文修改前可得18分。

曾為帥

善良

愛好：旅游、看書、聽音樂、打籃球

座右銘：Towering genius disdains a beaten path.It seeks regions hitherto unexplored.

就讀學校：湖北省武漢市江漢區(qū)一初慧泉中學金雅校區(qū)七年級（3）班

指導老師：周蕓

Without You—ROY

To be honest,you are such a good person that gives me deep impression.When I first met you,you were taller than me.You are like a friendly brother to me.I cannot imagine if I had not met you,what would I have become.You are so handsome that you are popular in your class.You wear a pair of glasses.You look like a wise man who is very knowledge able.You have short straight hair so you look so candid.When I talk with you or discuss with you,although we have different opinions,every time you are right.

You help me a lot.I think we are always good friends.A famous saying goes,“A friend is a second self.”You are not me,but you know me more than I know myself.When I get into trouble,you always tell me to be confident.I still remember what you said.“Do not be so hard on yourself,and take care of yourself.”I cannot be without you.“You are my sunshine.”

出生日期：2004年10月10日

愛好：閱讀、畫畫、書法

座右銘：人努力了不一定會成功，但放棄了就一定會失敗。

就讀學校：江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學七（2）班

指導老師：陳傳光

My Pets

I keep goldfish as pets.I like them very much.They are orange and have beautiful tails and fins.They like bubbling.I usually give them fish food once a day.When I go close to them,they will swim toward me and look excited.But I won’t feed them too much because it’s not good for them.Goldfish are so small and soft.I am always very careful not to pick them up with my hands.It is very important to keep the fish bowl clean.I usually clean the bowl twice a week.I’ll look after them till the end.

張智玉

善良

出生日期：2002年11月12日

愛好：畫畫

座右銘：虛心使人進步，驕傲使人落后。

就讀學校班級：江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學八（1）班

指導老師：陳傳光

My First DIY Job

DIY is popular among young people.I did my first DIY job yesterday!

Last week,I bought some paint and two brushes online.After I got everything ready,I read the instructions.Then I started the job.At first,I painted the wall blue.It seemed a little boring.Then I had an idea.I painted a boat and some colourful fish on the blue wall.I was glad about my job.But the room got messy and I spent an hour tidying it up.

I was tired after the job.But I was also excited because I did an amazing job.

張騰

好學

出生日期：2002年2月27日

座右銘：一分耕耘，一分收獲。

就讀學校班級：河北省阜城縣第三中學八年級（4）班指導老師：張超

A Letter to Zhang Jianmin

Dear Zhang Jianmin,

How time flies!You have been studying in London for nearly two months.Well,how’s everything going?

I’m glad to tell you that I’ll go to London to take part in an English speech contest in June.This is not only an honor,but also a great chance for me to improve myself.However,I have some trouble in collecting materials and using the language.I’ll be very thankful if you can give me a hand to solve the problems.After the contest,I’ll drop in at your school.Please wait for my call.

I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Zhang Teng

Our New School Term

Everything is new in middle school—a new school,new classmates,new teachers,new subjects...But not everything is enjoyable in the new environment.Maybe you don’t know how to make new friends at school,you feel pressure from other students,or there are too many sub jects and you don’t know how to learn well.You may not be happy because of these problems.

Don’t worry.Everything is hard in the beginning.It is a big change from a primary school to a middle school.It’s OK to have problems.You can go to your parents and teachers for help.They’ll be very glad to help you.

Because there are more subjects to learn in middle school,you need to use your time wisely.It’s important and helpful.

Anyway,middle school is a new start in your life.Study hard,then you will be very successful.

我們的新學期

中學里的一切都是新的——新學校、新同學、新老師、新科目……但新環(huán)境中并非一切都讓人快樂。也許你不知道在學校如何結交新朋友，你可能感受到了來自其他同學的壓力，或有太多的科目，而你不知道如何學好這些科目。這些問題可能會讓你開心不起來。

別擔心，萬事開頭難。從小學到中學是一個很大的轉折。遇到問題很正常。你可以向父母或老師尋求幫助。他們會很高興幫助你。

在中學里你有很多課程要學，因此你需要合理利用時間。這很重要，對你有幫助。

總之，中學是你人生中一個嶄新的開始。努力學習，你一定會成功的。